Breakthrough

What do you think? I'm trying to get back into my groove.

What do you call this? 

A breakup or a breakthrough?

A bulls-eye or a big miss?

A broken record or just new?

Some say I'm a masterpiece,

I just smile at their flattery.

Some say I'm a big disaster,

so why do they stay long after?

Emotions like fuel running through my veins;

Try to hold me down but it won't sway

my furious funneling of fearlessness for

anything that stands in my way. I'll bust down the door. 

I could be what I choose, when I choose, how I say it.

I'm tired of living in fear, hiding from daytime.

It's about time, overdue time, that I start rhymes

instead of sitting around, it's time I say it and spray it.

Rhyme schemes? Forget rhyme schemes.

This is my time, I'm my own king.

I roll through, just bowl through

any pin in my own road too.

Cold days, I just roll plays;

see Shakespeare, in his old years?

Didn't slow down, didn't take a bow,

until all of his work was finished. "Wow!"

Now me here, I'm no Picasso,

even if my work's similar as snow.

Snow flakes are just milkshakes

on steroids without all the taste.

But they're all so unique you say?

Just like my works I referenced, aye?

Agree? Disagree? Somewhere in the middle?

I'm sorry I can't argue with you or even piddle.

I got work to do, things to write, stuff to see.

Places to be, if you know what I mean.

So give me that mic, that pike, that stick.

Watch me stick the landing jumping out of this pit.

It's time for a breakthrough with a little bit catastrophe.

See ya when I land, but for now, this is all Me.

Author's Note

Getting back into my groove required a breakthrough.

Reviews

[iveltac]

Very nice poem david. Keep up the good work.

[~]

I could not help but think of Jack Frost while reading your poem :) I am sure it has nothing to do with it, but your stick, and jumping and the attitude of this write matches well. A poet that wants to know yet, has his own opinion- I see a good usage of oxymoron, and a poet trying to find their voice.

[Malen]

It's familiar, influenced.
A grand statement.
Rebel writers always bring it!

Keep up the good write!

[Haeshin]

There's a surge of strength and determination that stays throughout. I like it.

[Ana B.]

A beautiful, vivid incentive. I could relate to it rightaway. Excellent words and thoughts.

[Marimartha Mardynz]

Really. Step aside. Poet coming through. Really nice work up there bratha

[Lavender Soya]

I enjoyed it from start to finish. Great work! It's nicely written. It's amusing to notice that your remarked you'll forget about the rhyme scheme but still ended to do it in the succeeding lines. That's a true poet, the rhyming comes naturally. Kudos! :-)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good poem, well written, it's a breakthrough for sure. Like it very much, David. :) Rudi

[Pushkar Prabhat]

"step aside, poet coming through"
amazing poem....
awesome thoughts.....
i believe there are no rules for writing a poem, except that it is not prose!
loved it!!!
:)
btw "step aside, poet coming through" this could be worn on a tshirt. right?

[Not here]

Lol i'd buy that t-shirt. or 50 of them

[ARevenantKingdom [ARK]]

This is awesome! I love the flow. I like how you go back and forth in the beginning about how, from the outside, it's unclear if you/the situation is a mess-up or a masterpiece, and then go on to declare your own position, but in the end you wrap it up by affirming both sides: "It's time for a breakthrough with a little bit of catastrophe". That was my favorite line, and the perfect way to end the dual nature of the poem. Well done!