Breakthrough

What do you think? I'm trying to get back into my groove.

What do you call this? 

A breakup or a breakthrough?

A bulls-eye or a big miss?

A broken record or just new?

Some say I'm a masterpiece,

I just smile at their flattery.

Some say I'm a big disaster,

so why do they stay long after?

Emotions like fuel running through my veins;

Try to hold me down but it won't sway

my furious funneling of fearlessness for

anything that stands in my way. I'll bust down the door. 

I could be what I choose, when I choose, how I say it.

I'm tired of living in fear, hiding from daytime.

It's about time, overdue time, that I start rhymes

instead of sitting around, it's time I say it and spray it.

Rhyme schemes? Forget rhyme schemes.

This is my time, I'm my own king.

I roll through, just bowl through

any pin in my own road too.

Cold days, I just roll plays;

see Shakespeare, in his old years?

Didn't slow down, didn't take a bow,

until all of his work was finished. "Wow!"

Now me here, I'm no Picasso,

even if my work's similar as snow.

Snow flakes are just milkshakes

on steroids without all the taste.

But they're all so unique you say?

Just like my works I referenced, aye?

Agree? Disagree? Somewhere in the middle?

I'm sorry I can't argue with you or even piddle.

I got work to do, things to write, stuff to see.

Places to be, if you know what I mean.

So give me that mic, that pike, that stick.

Watch me stick the landing jumping out of this pit.

It's time for a breakthrough with a little bit catastrophe.

See ya when I land, but for now, this is all Me.

Author's Note

Getting back into my groove required a breakthrough.

Reviews

[Wordsmith_Artemis]

I really loved this piece. Has a great flow to it. Is it a rap, by chance? Because it runs like one, and I loved that about it.

[Not here]

yes i intended it to be a rap :) thank you. i appreciate it.

[Wordsmith_Artemis]

You bet! It's an excellent piece :)

[Corbin Driver]

Good job, the only mistake I see in it, is you forgot to capitalize the "I" in the last line in the fourth stanza, in the phrase "it's time i say it and spray it." Overall great job!

[Not here]

okay thanks ill fix that :) your the first one to notice it. and i appreciate your reviews

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Coming of age with spoken words
Chattering with constant contrasts

[Not here]

thank you for reviewing josie :)

[Moonlight]

Wow! Really nice.. and I liked how you have used two contrasting views of people about the same person.. it is a really nice poem. Good work. :)

[Not here]

thanks i appreciate it

[Moonlight]

You are welcome!

[Kimberlee]

very beautiful, and nicely worded.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I like this stubborn little piece bit much of an overuse of the comma though could use some editing

[Not here]

Thanks :) I appreciate you reviewing my work

[Sunny]

This is pretty good! Keep up the good work! Would like to read some more of your work sometime! :)

[Not here]

Thanks alice :) and i have lots of poems up if you want to read them

[Sunny]

I will check them out sometime

[Not here]

ok thanks :)

[Sunny]

Yeah No problem!! :D

[Kayleen]

you have a really good flow a few bits are a little rough maybe a syllable off but definitely could tell this was a rap before you even mentioned anything. very good. u had some clever and original lines throughout :)

Snow flakes are just milkshakes
on steroids without all the taste.

^ love this

[Not here]

if you can make a few jokes about ____ is just ____ on steroids, they are the funniest things ever!!!

[Nini]

Brilliant comparisons and visuals. I really enjoyed it...looks like you're in the groove :-)

[Shari Robinson]

This is great, I love it, so strong and vivid.