Emotionless

Looking but not seeing- Listening but not hearing- Knowing but not believing- Touching but not feeling.

Engulfed in emotions,

pierced by pain,

Poisonous potions,

consumed in shame.

Doubled down,

dead to all.

It still astounds

when I fall.

Emotions rage

and tear and claw

throughout my skin

while I fall.

My brain exploding,

not a sound

to warn the world

I am unbound.

I had it all.

And then I fall.

The world was mine;

'twas simply lies.

Emotions, feelings, shame, and hate;

my world crumbling, oh the weight!

My shoulders cannot stand the rate

that I ever crumble and break.

Let me lie here, in this hole.

I dug it for myself, so low.

And I will forever wait

in this so perpetual state:

Emotionless.

Author's Note

Thank you for whoever read this. I appreciate you spending some of your time reading this. I didn't really have anyone to talk to about it so I put it into a poem.

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

Rage or hate or whatever does feel as though you are in a place you cannot escape. Interesting write and felt different than most of yours that I have read. Can't tell you why. You do need to find someone to talk with if you cannot find focus on your own through writing. Just sayin.

[Not here]

thank you and i do have someone to talk to about it now. a lot has changed since this was published. i appreciate your concern :)

[Willard Wells]

From most of your writing I have felt you were dealing with everything fine and just piece made me mention it. Glad to hear things have changed.

[Not here]

yes of course. thank you willard :)

[Amy R]

this holds strong emotions to it,
love the way u wrote it, again ur style of writing always interests me.
great job! :)

[Not here]

thanks amy :) im glad

[Amy R]

ur welcome....

[Mila]

You have a good hand on portraying emotions, well done with this one!

[Sophy Freebirds]

"Emotionless"-this is the adjective or endearment i earned from my family.Though i try or strive to be that there is always that last vestige of emotion in me which leads to my Freakin defeat.But we can be defeated not destroyed.So thumbs up to this.We all have been there when we ourselves are our bestfriends,lover and parents.What matters is we come out of that bottomless pit renewed. *eep writing*Intense write with heavy images.

~Sophy

[Mary Bradley]

Well written and quite strong emotion in it

[Riley Justine]

Exactly how I feel a lot of the time. Amazing job. You brought out your emotions really well. I absolutely aspire to be as talented at rhyming schemes as you are. Really good job.

[stephanycacas]

i love it. "emotionless", but every line burst out with so much emotions...

[Deepika]

I can relate well to this..Feels like hiding from the world and refuge in a gloomy cote where nothing else matters but peace of mind! Good write :)

[nazia]

well written.. nicely expressed but there is one tense agreement i would like to point out.
I had it all.
And then I fall.

It would be better to write fell.. maybe to rhyme you wrote so..
I had all well
and then I fell..

[Cool Girl]

That's how I felt since August. This poem is sad yet beautiful. There is so much emotion and it's almost as if hope has been lost. I truly love this poem :)