Alone

I'm not a poet, an author, or that great;

but i know what it feels like when you take the bait;

you fall for someone and they fall right back;

and then much too soon your forced to go and pack;

We all make mistakes and we all believe a lie;

holding onto the past only makes us want to cry; 

Its hard to let go and its hard to move along;

all those people out there goofin around, singin their own song;

Some of us are like them, tryin to ignore the pain; 

Some of us just go around pretendin life is but a game;

But the fame and the games could never hope to contain;

Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;

We all dream, we all hope, and even sometimes desire

to reach down inside and put a spark to that fire;

We all at some point want to make a change in the world;

and everybody wants to see their own flag unfurled;

So what happens when we fall and we find ourselves on the ground?

What do we do when all we do is stepped on and pound?

Think about what happens when you have nothing left.

Be prepared for the trials and know what to do when your a mess.

If you are depressed, scared, or confused;

Understand that there are some people who would lose

anything to make you happy, do anything to make you glad;

and if you have those people in your life things wont be all that bad.

This is just a piece of work from a normal guy like me,

I'm not a poet and this poem might be a catastrophe.

But remember what I said and try to understand,

When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand.

Author's Note

I have never written a poem before and this was the best I have done. If this was helpful to you, I'm glad.

Reviews

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You have nailed the sentiment behind all the games of love David and you certainly acknowledge it at the end of stanza three: "Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;". We all have flames inside of us waiting to be stoked with the love of another. While your piece speaks of issues we face when we rush in, or someone else sees it as a game, or we fall, there is also a great deal of hope left for us in your last line: "When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand." If we surround ourselves with family and friends then we can be a little more content as we patiently wait to find someone to share our passions with, A good first poem indeed.

[wordman]

a beautiful write with a beautiful message
if you can touch somebody`s heart or provoke a new start
you have done it well

[Lizardo]

Damn, This is a remarkable Piece of poetry!
Oh my god, I just simply in love with this poem!
(By the way, I'm Lizardo)
You added everything that we all feel in life, from sadness to happiness, from falldowns to uphigh's
Amazing piece of poetry, simply incredible!

[Mila]

A very well written poem. It's shocking that you've never written poetry before this, if you had not mentioned that I would have thought that you've been doing this for a while.

Well done!

[Cool Girl]

This was absolutely remarkable! The last line is so very beautiful. You are my friend, David. You can grab my hand and I can grab yours. I'm always here for you, I promise. This was just such a great poem! I love it so much. You are such a good writer and have so much talent. As you keep writing, you'll get even better. Great job! Take care :)

[Cool Girl]

I can't believe this already got 80 views and 16 reviews!
I think that's more than I've gotten within a week xD

[Jamestown]

Great piece of work and wonderful message, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Not here]

Thank you alot, Jamestown. I'm glad you liked it.

[Not here]

:) you guys are what makes this website awesome.

[Not here]

Call me selfish, but i find complementing reviews very constructive :) hehe