Alone

I'm not a poet, an author, or that great;

but i know what it feels like when you take the bait;

you fall for someone and they fall right back;

and then much too soon your forced to go and pack;

We all make mistakes and we all believe a lie;

holding onto the past only makes us want to cry; 

Its hard to let go and its hard to move along;

all those people out there goofin around, singin their own song;

Some of us are like them, tryin to ignore the pain; 

Some of us just go around pretendin life is but a game;

But the fame and the games could never hope to contain;

Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;

We all dream, we all hope, and even sometimes desire

to reach down inside and put a spark to that fire;

We all at some point want to make a change in the world;

and everybody wants to see their own flag unfurled;

So what happens when we fall and we find ourselves on the ground?

What do we do when all we do is stepped on and pound?

Think about what happens when you have nothing left.

Be prepared for the trials and know what to do when your a mess.

If you are depressed, scared, or confused;

Understand that there are some people who would lose

anything to make you happy, do anything to make you glad;

and if you have those people in your life things wont be all that bad.

This is just a piece of work from a normal guy like me,

I'm not a poet and this poem might be a catastrophe.

But remember what I said and try to understand,

When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand.

Author's Note

I have never written a poem before and this was the best I have done. If this was helpful to you, I'm glad.

Reviews

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You have nailed the sentiment behind all the games of love David and you certainly acknowledge it at the end of stanza three: "Inside of every single one of there sits a waiting flame;". We all have flames inside of us waiting to be stoked with the love of another. While your piece speaks of issues we face when we rush in, or someone else sees it as a game, or we fall, there is also a great deal of hope left for us in your last line: "When you fall down, reach up and grab your friend's hand." If we surround ourselves with family and friends then we can be a little more content as we patiently wait to find someone to share our passions with, A good first poem indeed.

[Saddam]

It is not just a wonderful write, heartly done poem. Penned by reasons and circumstances.
Great read friend.

[Ishita Dixit]

David! This is such a great piece of work!
Often we lament on what we've lost instead of celebrating what we have.
Keep up the good work!

[Nene]

Its truely written from the heart

[Nene]

Amazing.... I loved it.. Its very encouraging. It clearly shows that everyone goes through the same problems just the attitude is different.. I was so lost in it I didn't even notice the mistakes... Its lovely!!! My fav line was
'Inside of every single one, there sits a waiting flame...

[AaronFreitas]

Beautiful work! I am glad I came across this poem.... Cool Girl referred me to it and I am glad. Keep up he good work and thanks for sharing :)

[Hearthis]

Not bad. I'd point out on line 4 that "your" should be "you're".
Since this is your first poem, I'll go easy on the review. The overall mood and tone is good, and that's what I feel is the best feature in the story. It gives the sense of the depressing atmosphere, and judging by the message in this poem, it's fitting and appropriately done.
It's a generally good poem for a first-time poet. Keep up the work and progress is what I'll say. :)

[Kimberly Miller]

Amazing! Love it! Its so true and down-top-earth! Thank you for the read request! Really enjoyed this one! :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Very good first poem/post. Nice rhyming and flow. Just polish it up a bit with grammar mistakes (e.g.: it should be "you're" instead of "your" in some of your lines). The message is clear, profound, and wise.

[closed]

well said

then let us unite under the marvelous truth of these words
as true friends and artists

nice to meet you


-Dream

[Mary Bradley]

Truthful and heartfelt poem :-) ...nice flow and inspiring . friend in need a true friend indeed :-)