-when or if feelings are strong there is no changing the style one chooses to adopt unless you are adept at it, but still the ear gets to be trained in a certain way, I am finding reading here, and people aren't always looking for a this or that style
-'homicide,' and 'psychopathic cliques' are rarer compared to words used in everyday workaday worlds; also 'comprised'
-very nice; I haven't had the burden of helping a lot of people without kindness given in return, but it does happen from time to time and it sounds frustrating...I'm sure your readers or audience as you get to finding one may take this as a warning to remember that things like this can happen, so beware
Wow, your heart really was put into this piece! I love it, because not only do I completely understand you and how feel in your poem, but it was very well written! Cannot wait to read more of your works :)
(P.S I hope that you will understand the greatness that will come from perseverance in the future, you will do great things if you keep it up with how you are writing :)
wow, amazing piece but i am not too into the vengeance or homicidal part of thing Lol but i do feel it sometimes. Amazing is all i could say.
i used to be bullied when i was younger because i was very very short and very very innocent and i know how it feels man. The emotion served the poem really really well.
MAN! This poem contains so much power, which comes from your inner feelings/thought, and perhaps desire. The man in tall shoes is in a mission for vengeance, not forgiveness...I must say though, that forgiveness is a very powerful thing, which not many seemed to know!
I really enjoyed reading this poem!
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Thank you! And the 'man' in the poem is me. Thank you for reviewing!
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Yes, I know...I was able to figure that out because of the intense emotion ;)
my pleasu.. read moreYes, I know...I was able to figure that out because of the intense emotion ;)
I love this one man, I know how it feels to be bullied and it really does just quantify the experience.
The pain and darkness all in all being forced into hateful thoughts, but having the self control to not kill anyone is always productive :3
Well worded and fantastically written!
Also, you used "abhor", one of my most favourite words!
Well done mate, keep them coming ^_^
Thank you! BlankCypher, I will definitely keep the bully poems coming, I have enough hateful thought.. read moreThank you! BlankCypher, I will definitely keep the bully poems coming, I have enough hateful thoughts towards my bullies to last a lifetime. Thank you for reviewing!
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No worries man! The hateful thoughts may never go away, but what did they give you? Literary taent a.. read moreNo worries man! The hateful thoughts may never go away, but what did they give you? Literary taent and something to use them for. That's worth it in the end!
-when or if feelings are strong there is no changing the style one chooses to adopt unless you are adept at it, but still the ear gets to be trained in a certain way, I am finding reading here, and people aren't always looking for a this or that style
-'homicide,' and 'psychopathic cliques' are rarer compared to words used in everyday workaday worlds; also 'comprised'
-very nice; I haven't had the burden of helping a lot of people without kindness given in return, but it does happen from time to time and it sounds frustrating...I'm sure your readers or audience as you get to finding one may take this as a warning to remember that things like this can happen, so beware
I will review your work if you send me a read request, I like to help writers get off of the ground, I will also suggest ideas for your work if needed.
Please note that I don't really like poetry... more..