Bullies

A poem comprised of the feelings I get when bullied.

There's a certain Hellish realm,

Reserved for anyone who is battered, beaten, and forced to submission.

Every evening while I sleep,

There's no hiding from their voices in my mind,

There's no place in Heaven high,

Where I crawl away and die,

The only real solution's absolutely homicide.

All the things I have endured,

All my torment, I abhor.

I don't care about fitting in,

Or these psychopathic cliques.

Nor what I am classified to be: nerd or cool.

And the next fool to stomp on my book, or to slap away my tart,

I will make them fear the pain inside my heart.

I'm a teenager on a mission,

And contrition's not my style.

Am I a monster or a man?

I cannot say.

All I know is that salvation,

Is just passed all this damnation.

Salvation... Just one shot away.

You think I've arrived bearing forgiveness.

I come not with peace,

but vengeance.

There's a high price to pay,

for the forgiveness I purveyed.

I once was a boy, so friendly and yielding.

Everyone with a problem coming to me.

I once helped a fellow who then smacked me farewell,

That's when I learned to just,

Leave people in Hell.

`A poem by Ryan David Henderson

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

-when or if feelings are strong there is no changing the style one chooses to adopt unless you are adept at it, but still the ear gets to be trained in a certain way, I am finding reading here, and people aren't always looking for a this or that style

-'homicide,' and 'psychopathic cliques' are rarer compared to words used in everyday workaday worlds; also 'comprised'

-very nice; I haven't had the burden of helping a lot of people without kindness given in return, but it does happen from time to time and it sounds frustrating...I'm sure your readers or audience as you get to finding one may take this as a warning to remember that things like this can happen, so beware

[Ryan Henderson]

Yes, although I am only 14, I do have a fairly unusual and poetic way of speaking, even aloud.

[Ryan Henderson]

thank you for the review, it helps!

[Malark]

This was certainly a dark delight. Brings me back to when I knew somebody who spoke to me like this in high school, but he turned out alright! Good write!

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you very much!

[RileyRedding]

This has a flow, that's as powerful as it's message.

Are you Malcolm X? Running for office?

A style that truly depicts an intelligent speaker.

What a pleasure.

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for reading!

[yesidid]

this sounds like a poem about tklittle andyou wrote it well

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the review!

[yesidid]

you are more than welcome

[Yuppitsme]

Ryan,
A few thoughts:
I absolutely love the way that you change up the pentameter...the beats change with your change in thoughts.
Young man, I can feel the pain in your heart...and even though there is good and bad in human nature at every age, I have two young adults who were bullied horribly who would 'Amen' my next sentiments: first, don't change who you are for any bully....keep writing!! You are talented and special and second--I PROMISE YOU, it gets easier. For a few reasons. Hang in there, Ryan.

"All I know is that salvation
Is just passed all this damnation"

Is there a reason you used 'passed' instead of 'past?'

All in all, Ryan, your poem left my heart hurting, which any good work of art should do--evoke emotion. Thank you.

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you very much for the review! I will change the passed to past. My bad.

[Yuppitsme]

I kinda like it the other way too, but I didn't know if it was accidental. I do it all the time!
read moreI kinda like it the other way too, but I didn't know if it was accidental. I do it all the time!

[Jessie]

I think this is great! I can relate.

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the review!

[Jessie]

Your welcome!

[Moonlight]

Powerful and extremely expressive! The theme of the poem is so common yet the maturity of this piece surfaces as uniquely as i can imagine. Your writing is indeed one filled with that feeling of not resting in quiet after being hit...but standing up and hitting with twice the force. Great work! :)

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the awesome review!

[Lizardo]

I think that this a powerful poem and has potential in it since nowdays everyboy is talking about the fight againts bullies and everything
Wonderful piece of work

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the wonderful review!

[Sami Khalil]

Never liked bullies. But I like this write. Spread more awareness. Bravo for speaking up...:).................

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for reviewing!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[jennifer little]

wonderful job on this poem i loved it and enjoyed reading it keep up the good work and keep on writing

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for reviewing!

[luvs2write]

This is such a powerful poem! I hate bullies. My school is full of stuck up, self righteous snobs... Just don't take anything they say seriously. Bullies are only mean to people they are afraid of.

[Ryan Henderson]

Heh, they aren't scared of me, but thank you for the review!