A poem my 7th grade crush wrote me.

A little poem that my seventh grade crush wrote me, it is a fantasy poem, I like it :D

One by one, the white rose petals open.
My daily torture is now past.
Like an endless stream of dreams about you, our time flows into silence.
When I am lost on my short path, you are my guiding light.

Your smile dissolved the cloudiness in my heart.
How many pieces are forgotten like a dream?
Even if the setting sun were to take away this moment,
Our two hearts overlap.

My feelings for you have limitless depth,
It is truly like destiny in my hands.
Grasping you again and again; Losing you again and again
And so by chance we meet again.

My heart longs for you, just like the flowers long for rain.
The night makes today into tonight,
I wish that our two hearts were one
This is what I wish so hard for.

One by one, the white rose petals scatter over time.
My feelings for you will never fade.

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

I admit, I had to read this one several times, and am still noticing little things... I really like the way this one feels dark, yet romantic and dreamy... can feel heaviness, yet enchanting breeze fluttering throughout.. the flow is beautiful and depth is moving... have yet to figure out link between what I interpret from writing and the title, but I like when writers make me think... and when they can also make me FEEL, like this one did, then it is pretty darn awesome!.. well done!

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you so much for reading it and I'm glad you liked it!

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome, it was my pleasure..

[jennifer little]

i liked your poem great work on it great details and wonderful work keep up the good work

[Ryan Henderson]

thank you :)

[yuki]

This is good though i would request putting comas at the end of each line :) other then that its really cute :D

[Laura Lynn]

deep and mystical, I feel like it could take a long time to figure this out

[Ryan Henderson]

Yup, this piece for a while now, I'm in grade nine now, so two years. I do not know what it all means.