Twilight

another poem put together by me.

Here we are, far beyond the distant cries,
But now all we face, are the endless lies.
through the uncertainty and tainted consciousness we climb,
now we have found the nostalgic time.

Through the pain, your tattered life will fall,
and all this time, you were looking for a wake up call.
with someone to walk hand in hand,
in dreams of endless time.
Those dreams, the endless dreams of pain inside.

But now the time has come, and you are free once again,
to walk this familiar, lonely road in vain.
sometimes your dreams turn into dust,
but who's there to blame?

Try not to forget, and to understand,
that your life will slip through your figures like sand.
get back on your feet,
you've got one more chance to make it right this time!
The reason you stand here, it's your will to live and to reach for the stars.

Reviews

[Peach]

I feel the determination poured into this work of art.

[Ryan Henderson]

Thanks for the review!

[Sophy Freebirds]

An inspiring piece of art.I love the works which boost me up.And reading this did just that. It has straight forward lines,no complicated metaphors to churn my brain .But it still has a good rhyming pattern to it which gives my ears a good sound when i read it out.A good write :)

~Sophy

[Ryan Henderson]

Thanks for the review!

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

I really like this. There's something about a good rhyming scheme that always captures me. I really like the style of this piece. Its so straightforward but yet intensely poetic at the same time. Wonderful work.
Stay inspired.

[Ryan Henderson]

Thanks for the review!

[Roshan Nair]

The last verse is a poetic clincher. Great piece on how we wished take ownership of our act in life.
Good job ryan!

[Ryan Henderson]

Thanks for the review!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"that your life will slip through your figures like sand. " I really like this line, very deep emotional poem makes you read it a few times over

[Ryan Henderson]

I am glad you like it!

[Leviathus Fortes]

Every life has a purpose. Every heart a dream.

Dreams are only achievable if you are willing to fight for them.

Sometimes it may feel like everything has stood still.

It may even feel useless to go on.

It all comes down to inner passion.

A drive. A will.

[Ryan Henderson]

Great review! Also great advice. Thank you so much!

[Moonlight]

Amazing work! You have amazing writing skills. To be able to deliver such depth through a collection of a few words is indeed an amazing talent! And your work speaks it all for you! This poem has such amazing flow and each line such deep meaning. It's a beautifully written and finely crafted piece of art! Keep up the good work! :)

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the review!

[Lizardo]

This is a fine piece of work I love every single detail of it and this line:
''to walk this familiar, lonely road in vain. ''
You are truely a great writer and this poem proves it
Incredible piece of work!

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the gracious review!

[Lizardo]

You are welcome!

[Cool Girl]

Wow, I've never read a poem by you.... This was amazing! Keep up the good work!

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you for the review, I appreciate it!

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome, Ryan:)

[David Ung]

This poem is great! To be honest with you, I don't really like poems, but I love this one. The introduction is great and the ending is too. Love to read more poems from you. :)

[Ryan Henderson]

Thank you! I never liked poems until recently, I then started writing my own poetry and I have taken a liking to it ;)