The Boy and Ruby

A ruby shines between the leaves
dang'ling high above his head
the boy stands tall and stretches
still the gem escapes his hands

So he pleads his gut to lift him
and jumps and leaps and bounces
"oh to have a birdie's wings,
so I could eat that pretty thing!"

the trunk is wide but branches low
this gives him a daring thought
he's tough enough to make the climb,
are branches enough to hold him?

And so he climbs the aging tree
reaching the branch of his desire
but when his weight is placed, a Snap!
Then down came boy and branch and fruit

and as the boy upon the ground
felt a pain beneath him there
when lifting himself up to see,
oh no! His crushed ruby!

Reviews

[Dane Osborne]

This was cool and very well written. innocence, whimsy, fear, and disappointment all together in one as it so often is. Kudos and well done.

[Onyx_Rayne]

Awww..poor little fella.. I can feel his pain. Not only the physical pain but the loss of that luscious ruby ( In my mind it's a pomegranate...hehe )

The imagery is extremely vivid in this write and the word flow - fantastic!

Loved the entire piece, from start to finish - keep writing :)

[bbb]

This is great, storytelling within poetry!

[Brittany]

This holds that childhood sheen that seems to loose its luster with age. The innocence of the young boy and his toils set up a nice undertone for what we aim for as adults, and the disappointment that can result in from recklessness. Well done.

[KatiePie]

This had such amazing imagery, reading it was like going on an adventure. I loved it!
-Cathrine

[Joshua Donahue]

really nice! it reminds me of those vintage movies and shows of young kids playing in the forest before any of the big technology fiasco. really great piece!

[Laura]

You have a serious gift of creating imagery. I really like this poem, I thought it sounded very light, if that makes sense, airy in a way. I thought this was really good, and I can't pick a favorite spot because I like the whole thing. Nice job!