Shawshank

The night before My 18th Birthday, I watched the Shawshank Redemption. I wrote this at 11 that night as I felt I was not ready to face the responsibilities of life.

Shawshank

 

12 o'clock they said, the first of march,

I'm getting out, or am I?

 

Hope is a dangerous thing, I know,

But everyone needs something.

 

These walls have taken eighteen years,

I've finally reached the air.

 

It's only when I see my one desire,

That I realise it's not for me.

 

Like waiting for Santa, I wait in hope,

 Hoping to pass through quietly.

 

But after the eve, what is the prize?

Memories are all that I gain.

 

But after the eve, what is the prize?

Memories are all that remain.

 

But awake I will lie, the longest night,

500 yards of s**t.

 

I have only one hope, a misty hope,

That friends won't leave me behind.

 

I hear them brag, but I don't see

What real difference it makes.

 

I'm scared of entering this unknown world,

Tomorrow I awake a man.

 

I'm not ready to be my own one self,

I'm not ready to face the world.

 

I now have one long final haul,

The last part of the game.

 

I walk along a stone-built wall,

I gaze at majestic leaves.

 

I hope that the treasure is waiting for me,

That was promised by my friends.

 

So I say goodbye, I scrape in the wall.

 

                                  "AZ WAZ DAVID"

 

 

 

Author's Note

I know that the beats are all over the place, but it was wrote in like 15 minuites. let me know what you think or any questions you might have.

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

Oh, oh, oh....
When I was about to turn 18 I was freaking out too. The idea of more freedom, responsibilities and privileges is nice, but the idea of weaving into the cruel current of the world terrified me!

Eventually everyone goes with the flow, some more faster than others.

I commend you (which doesn't mean too much because I'm a nobody) for using Shawshank Redemption :D

I love that movie and you incorporate it well into your piece. It's always gonna get harder before it gets better. Brillliant. I love when external influences show like this. It shows you meditate on what you watch or listen. Some people block it out of their minds and watch for entertainment but it looks like you took something out of it. And whenever you think of responsibility you will remember this movie.

Hope you keep writing like this. Very non-mainstream.

Brilliant :D