Everything Is Going To Be Okay

This is the first time i've tried something like this, please let me know what you think and what i can approve on. I hope you enjoy!

You told me there was light at The end of the tunnel,

   So why can i just see the Darkness?

                                         Why are the walls closing in; Crushing the life out of my body,

The pain is never ending and i Can't hear my soul screaming;

                                             I can't hear it begging for help;
                                   I can See it reaching to my heart trying to say...

                                       'Everything is going to be okay'.

                          Everything they said to me was all just a lie,
But i know that today Is the day i don't fall for it anymore,
                      I am going to forget all of them,
               I am going to become a new person,
           I am going to be who i want to be,
Sure i pretend to be okay, but it is what i believe,
I believe that Everything is going to be okay.  

Reviews

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

In the end, everything will always be okay. Whether you believe it at first or not, it just takes time. There is always a light at the end of a dark tunnel, whether you are able to see it at the time or not. Believe there is a light somewhere and that you will find it. You are never alone with what you are feeling and I'm glad you rose up to become who you wanted to be and not what other people told you to be.

[Marissa Brazzell]

i loved it. this poem remind me of myself.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I actually really like this (: I can relate to this feeling, the hopelessness... Thinking that nothing is ever going to turn out well for you... People giving you false hope.. The pain... And then in the end, rising up against it, believing that things actually will be okay... Beautiful job with this, thanks for sharing (:

[Moon]

I think you did good for your first time . Keep up the good work ! I really liked it .

[Alexa Tasch]

I think you did well on this even if it was your first time. My eye was drawn right to the bold words which added to the emotion of the poem. Great write!

[JiDonnelly]

I'm not sure if this gives off empty promises and hope or the other way around.
never the less, Beautiful as always.

-JiDonnelly'

[dunnia]

this is simply beautiful i loke the message it gives to the reader

[For Worse]

This is amazingly sweet, and I love the message behind it. I'm impressed. Wonderful work you have going on.

[Erinne S.]

I liked the message behind this piece. I agree with DrD that the structure is a little confusing and takes away from the piece, but overall it was good and I enjoyed it.

~Erinne

[Jo March]

Sweet, lovely poem