Morning dream

Just a dream to live this morning

Strings I play

For the words you say

They get overlaid

And gleam a bright day

 

You come close to me and,

Hum the morning words

They bring the first strike of sun

Then I hear the chirp of young birds

 

You delight me with a soft kiss

And fill me with an eternal bliss

Then the racing breeze touch me through

And the sun smiles from Abyss

 

After a beautiful dream of smiling with you

I want you to say it through

The way I say “I love you”

U say, You love me too..

Reviews

[Dewella~Vintella]

Short, sweet, and beautifully written. nice rhythm and flow, and great use of imagery. In the last line I would have spell 'you' instead of using the letter 'U' but that is just me and my opinion. Otherwise wonderful piece. Keep up the good work.

[Darkstole]

Dear Dewella,

Thanks a lot for those wonderful words of yours.

Yes, you are correct that should have been ''you" and not "U" but just to make a vertical presence I kept it that way.

Thanks for the honest feedback.

Regards
Darkstole

[MsJewel]

A sweet and lovely little gem of romance. After a beautiful dream of smiling with you -- my favorite line. So very beautiful!

:) Julie

[Darkstole]

Dear Jewel,

Thanks for pulling our time to review my work.

It feels really great to hear such appreciating words.

Thanks once again!!

Regards
Darkstole

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem for love.
"After a beautiful dream of smiling with you
I want you to say it through
The way I say “I love you”
U say, You love me too.."
I like the above lines. Good when two people are content. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Darkstole]

Dear Coyote,

Thanks a lot for your valuable reviews.

It feels great to be appreciated.

Regards
Darkstole.

[prodicallife]

Woowww

That is soft, so delicate.

I love the way you described the wonderful welcome to a morning in one's life.

I hope God blesses you with the absolute love and blessings and you always are greeted with such warm mornings.

Stay blessed

Regards
Prodical

[Darkstole]

Dear Prodicallife

Thanks a lot for appreciating me for the writing.

I really appreciate your indulgence in boosting my confidence.

Regards
Darkstole