Marie

It all comes down to one

Forever you will drown

When the night is done

You will still go down

When your at your best

You forget all the rest

It is a test

If you still care

Life won't be fair

Because it always comes down to one

Author's Note

I think it needs some tweaking, it could flow a little better.

Reviews

[Libby McKeown]

It definitely needs work. The last line makes the poem, but the rest of the poem sounds unnatural. Read it aloud and test out your flow that way. Just my humble opinion. Thanks for posting.