What is perfect?

Wow, I have no clue what I've been writing about recently. Sorry about that. This was a mishmosh of various...I-don't-knows...

Sitting still.

Never loud.

Smartest one.

Very kind.

Lots of friends.

Always smiling...

 

Shivering.

Resists screaming.

Being pushed.

Secretly hating.

Feeling alone.

Always crying...

 

Take off the masks, and you will find

A person of a different kind.

 

Facade after facade, shes in disguise.

But liquid pain drips from her eyes.

 

You may think she's got everything

But she knows how much pain the world can bring.

 

And then she's gone.

Without a trace.

And you will never

see her face.

 

Until she's in her coffin.

The next day.

Author's Note

I'm sorry, this whole thing is so off the wall and bouncing all over the place. My brain's like that today.

Reviews

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

well i like it even if it is off the wall :)

[Susan14]

it's not bouncing all over the place, it's perfect! i loved it, i actually felt something inside me but i couldn't tell what it was, i liked your sense of rhythym. it brought more feeling to the poem, the longer lines in the middle were perfect, they really conveyed strong emotions that you could feel, same thing with the last two lines at the end. the wway you worded it had so much feeling in it and it was very, very, what's the word i'm looking for, it was very CREATIVE!, amazingly good and elegant

[Momo the Elf]

it's not bouncing off the wall all over the place.. i understood it... anyways, again, i like your sense of rhythym. the longer lines in the middle really convey such strong emotion, as do the two lines at the end. the wording you used is very creative. amazingly good and elegenterful :)