Carry the Burden

It's 11:11 :) Did this a few minutes ago, I think it's okay.

"I'm in darkness"

A black hole.

The demons of the past,

Of the present,

Of the future,

They swirl around me.

 

"I'm suffocating"

I reach out.

No one's there.

Why am I hoping?

 

"I can't breath"

The demons burrow in my head:

In my thoughts,

In my dreams.

 

"I can't take it anymore!"

 

Silence...

 

And then I feel your fingers

wrap themselves around mine.

 

Warmth.

 

And everything disappears.

 

And it's just us.

 

Reviews

[Susan14]

wow, i loved this one, i was speechless after reading it, i just didn't know what to say, my mother just read it and she loved it, she's one of those people that hate's all kinds of writing, but this one she was speechless, that means you really have a talent in you. I liked those few lines in italicss, it makes them more profound, it made them have more feelings in them. the poem is very well written especially the details, oh the details, i loved those! i felt like i was actually there in the poem, like it was happening to me, i could feel the fingers and that warmth surging through me, the title is amazing for this poem, keep up the great work, i can't wait to read mmore of your wrtiting, keep up the great work

[Momo the Elf]

wow! i'm nearly speechless... this poem was SO good! i like how you had those few lines in italics, it makes them more profound. its very well written, and especially the details! I could almost feel those fingers and that warmth surging through me... and great title too! :)

and yay 11:11! what did you wish for? :)