Hope?

First poem + Five minutes + Angst + Poor poet skills = This heap of trash. Ahh well, criticize, because there's a lot to criticize about.

 

It flickers,

 

Then fades.

 

It welcomes

 

The blades.

 

 

The blades,

 

They stab.

 

The wounds,

 

They scab.

 

 

They scab,

 

Remain.

 

They scar.

 

Explain?

 

 

Explain

 

The lies?

 

Repeat

 

Demise?

 

 

Demise.

 

I’m dead.

 

My hope?

 

It’s fled.

 

 

It’s lost.

 

It’s gone.

 

 

Author's Note

Sorry for the extremely poor quality. Did it five minutes ago, felt angsty, plus I'm not really a poet person.

Reviews

[Prateeksha Khot]

I liked it. Its a great job and I wonder how you came up with it in just five minutes. Great!

Keep up.

[Chirinos20]

I like it a lot, many words are not needed to make up a great poem. This piece shows just that. well done!!!!

[smiggle wiggle]

this is great!
it's simple but speaks to you.
great job! :)

[Susan14]

you are a poet person, this is amazing, don't you ever say that your bad at this, because you aren't,
now about the poem, i personally loved it, i could actually feel the emotions in it, you really know how to write a great poem

[Momo the Elf]

what do you mean poor quality??? this is amazing!! i love the rhythym of the poem; it gives it a kind of deeper, darker tone to it.... you're such a good writer~ im jealous of your awesomeness ^^

[Emily?]

This is really good, for not a poet! Great Job!

[Lexi =]]

Awesome Poem =)

[Emi]

Not bad at all actually. Sometimes the best works come in a moment of sudden emotion I should know, I write books now but poetry used to be my medium in my . . . darker days *cough* long story. Anyway the only thing I'd change is the font size, I kind of had trouble seeing it =)
Almost makes me feel old, lol.

[Krazy On The Outside]

I totally agree with that person becausde this is amazing!
I LOVED it! =)

[Bright Eyes]

Love the poem, HATE the description. Heap of trash? Not at all!! Poor poet skills? No, definitely not. This poem was actually really, really good. I really don't have any criticism for it. I like the questions throughout it, it gives a sense of a bit of confusion and anger.