The Sun Shines Continuously

This is a poem I wrote one day when it was raining and I was wishing that it was sunny and that I actually had a boyfriend to lie in the sun with.

The sun shines on me continously

I lie in the grass and feel its rays tickle my nose and my toes

The sun shines on our hands intertwined

We stare into eachother's eyes as the sun continues to shine

He kisses my nose, I laugh

The sun shines on us continously

 

 

Author's Note

I know that this poem is slightly if not completely corney. But I want your honest opinon and don't be to mean I am very emotional sensitive!!!

Reviews

[James K. Blaylock]

This is a really wonderful piece. I think we'll all done this very same thing at some point or another,

jkb

[nvfuefe]

I liked this cuz i guess many ppl can relate

[Cats Eye]

It was short, but it was still a fantastic write, it gave enough details to enstill an image upon my my mind.

[mick weller]

Oh how sweet is this...
what a wonderful sense of optimism you create,
if only, if only...

I'm thinking 'entwined' and a space here: 'eachother's'

...but I'm really pleased I clicked on your famous painting avatar now - I'm familiar with this painting from somewhere - do PM me if you know who the artist is...
lovely - you've put a smile on my face,
thankyou