Bane

He found his downfall in the locker room

Signing the contract of his own doom.

Coming back day by day.

Addiction,

The need,

Too strong to stay away.

Medusa’s tempting him to go just a bit further

Hallucinations causing a high pitched werther.

Running from Oz’s city

The hole he dug himself

It’s such a pity.

One more he tells himself

Sniffing the paint thinner.

Look at this sorry little sinner

Guess what this is his first week,

He’s only a beginner.

Reviews

[G!o]

This piece can be translated to various understand and i love that about it, though the first thing that comes to mind is drug buh i see it as someone in temptation but then i love the fantasy twist it has. This is an amazing write and creative.

[TurtleClark]

thanks! i wrote this for a health project and it was supposed to be a rap but it didn't work out that well. we were doing the drug unit and the one my group had was inhallants

[G!o]

Nice, you write rap too?

[TurtleClark]

Lol no im not good at it. the assignment was to write a rap

[Sami Khalil]

A very good poem . I liked the read a lot...:)

[Pax]

i see addiction and indulgence in this piece that speaks of reality... well all of us at some point i guess we have wrong choices... and our free will is thinning on the fine lining between right and wrong... Very expressive write...

[Devanshu Rajput]

the rhymed lines were fantastic..........good write

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Brilliantly penned. Well done.

[KeeD]

Wow I loved this, i'm writing a novel on an addict/junkie placed in the future.. and this poem totally describes the little kid he hangs out with. Inspiration, thank you this way really cool.

[Leslie Philibert]

This is very impressive, a poem based on a concrete image that turns into a story, which is a whole lot for a poem. I like this, the classical refs with Medusa and Werther but also the way it looks at a real tragedy. Very good.