My Lost Love

You were impossible to love,
but I tried and tried and tried.
I have never felt Love and Loss more fiercely
then I did, the day you died.

I held you close as you bleed out,
I heard sirens in the air,
but still I held you
and let go I did not dare,
as you sat up and coughed blood into my hair.

Your breathing was as shallow
as mine was quick
and in short jagged breaths, I managed to say,
"Oh God, Jack, please don't you quit."

You looked up at me
with longing in your eyes,
I knew you wanted to live,
but in less then a minute, you had died.

I stood and howled, my rage and revenge into the sky.
I swore on your death,
the world would pay
for the day

you were taken away.

Reviews

[xXChanceXx]

Whoa. This was very deep and emotional. I can relate to this... Very beautiful write.

[chandlerl]

thannk you =)

[xXChanceXx]

Welcomes. :)

[LostandAlone]

Wow. Very beautiful and strong... Emotional, and vengeful... This is also very relateble to me, personally. Beautiful...

[Chasity Reynolds]

woah! this gave me goosebumps! awesome job!

[KeeD]

A poignant write and a beautiful tribute to a love that held strong in the worst of storms.

An insensitive thing to say but I'm going to say it anyways (Jack is a name i'm never giving my child for all Jacks die a very sad tragic death be it the Titanic or Chans beautiful poetry)

[KAOlmsted]

Edgy, really great stuff. Like the beginning of a film, or a story...there's going to be some hell to pay. Nice work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad poem. I could feel the anger and grief in the poem. I like the realistic ending. Anger allowed us to be strong and go forward. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Baby Ricochet]

Dude this is f*****g intense

[chandlerl]

i'm gonna go ahead and take that as a good thing XD