Tears of Fire

A cascading of tears
A handful of vile
Death
Acompanied by Fallen Angels
Takes me to my doom.
Escorts me, to my doom.

All the while the tears fall,
like the rain, that drifts around me.
I say a soft goodbye,
to those I love.
For I will not see them again.

I try to hold my head high...
but why bother,
when tears fall
like fire around me.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Ah teenage angst...we meet again, old friend ;-) Not really seeing the light at the end of this one, but I guess you did advertise "occasional"...very compelling write. Good work. I don't know if it really does read like a suicide note, though..."escorting me to my doom" seems a bit over the top for that. If it was a suicide note, the end game for the writer would not be to head toward doom, but to escape what he/she feels is doom in life. Meh...either way, good stuff. Thanks for sharing.

[chandlerl]

Thank you for reviewing =)

[lovelydark&deep]

I love the darkness. And you painted such a hypnotizing visual.

[Silas]

That's pretty c:

[KeeD]

This ends on a sad note, like describing life and hardships (Fallen Angels), I would love to see you overcome these tears, but we all have our fires to put out and we all take our own time. I love your style of writing you certainly give character to emotions in a very beautiful even might I say tragic way.

[chandlerl]

Thank you. I always admire when someone can write beautifully and tragically and make them harmonize, and for my writing to be called what I most admire, is a much appreciated compliment of the highest nature. THank you, sincerly. =)

[fiery-san]

I can't help but agree with Baby Ricochet here... it does have that dark elements... death by fire perhaps? Overall, it's pretty catching. ^_^

[Baby Ricochet]

Sounds a little bit like a suicide note

[chandlerl]

huh it kinda does.