as I lay me down to sleep

"now I lay me down to sleep,

I pray the Lord my soul to keep, 

and if I die before I wake,

I pray my soul the lord to take"

the pillow muffles her cries

the darkness hides her pain

she knows she at the edge

she knows she's at the end

she begs and pleads with her mind

to break these chains and break this pain

she's scared and alone

she's shaken and breaking

all she wants is to fly

all she wants is to die

she's sick of crying

and she tired of trying

this is the end 

for her and as she puts the gun to her head

she ask the lord to take her soul

Reviews

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A dark, melancholic piece.....

Written from the depths of loneliness, your poem will resonate with many readers. In such moments of despair is when poets and writers find the greatest depth of wordplay and passion. This piece is simple yet infused with deep emotions.

I loved the title, very eloquent. Keep writing. Pour those negative emotions on to the page and then stand back and marvel at the power in your words.

A nice write.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thank you so much

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Nice prayer before put her self to sleep. At begin is just some kind of wish. But end have bitter taste and even thought. There is hope at end. She will be suffer no more.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thanks for the review

[Tbear]

A disturbing piece, but one that needed a reply so reply I did in verse.. please view..As She Lay Down To Sleep... write on dear one..write on

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thank you :) and I will