last words

It's not that I don't want to stop living 
It's just I can't keep living
I've been broken so many times
I don't even no where any of the pieces are now
I'm sorry I'm such a wast of space, time, and energy
You'll forget me soon enough 
I love you
These are my last words to the world 

Reviews

[ReedWrite]

Being a waste of space, time, and energy...is a matter of perspective. We each create our own space in this world, and imbue it with meaning. We cannot rely on others to give our personal space meaning or validity. If you do that, you set yourself up to crash and burn. Find your purpose...focus...and move with unrelenting determination toward that goal. Giving up robs you of everything, and like you said...sets you up to be forgotten soon enough. Better to pick yourself up off your knees...spit out the blood...and keep on keeping on. Some days, it's one breath at a time...one foot in front of the other. Eventually, you will find that place where you can leap and run, gasping in life to its fullest.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thank you so much

[Emosawa]

First of all, I like how it was short, as if you didn't have much time to say your final goodbye. Also, I liked how you spoke of not wanting to die, but not wanting to live. Finally, I loved that the final words that were aimed at the world were "I love you," most of the time when people write about this they make the character hate the world and wouldn't be positive in their final hours. It made the poem feel like it was real, it was uplifting in a dark way. Like the feeling you get when you know someone loves you, but you can't love them because they're not alive. It was dark, but dark is good. I loved the poem.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

awwe thanks so much I'm glad you liked it.

[Bleak_Darkness]

Wow this was certainly heartbreaking! I understand pain and unhappiness and even wrote a piece on it before, so this rang some bells with me! Good job and keep it up yeah! I look forward to more of your works!

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thank you so much :)