does it show?

I walk through these halls

past these walls

trying to keep a good face

trying to keep my head held high

put inside I crumble 

inside I die

inside they only thing left is pain

the mask that I show 

I'm afriad is falling so I ask

does it show

does the pain leak out

does the darkness surrond me

does it show

the misery I hold

please 

someone tell me please

does it show

am I finally not strong enough

to hide it all

to act like I'm fine

is this the end of me

for now I shall fall

so please tell me it doesn't show

Reviews

[mattavelli]

Hello, Shae! :)
Yes, it shows. It shows in your spelling. Haha
The emotion is strong in this poem. And, of course it shows. You broke the rules. You're supposed to accentuate the positive, eliminate the negative, and don't mess with mr inbetween. It seems to me that mr inbetween took over, like demonic possession.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

thanks and yeah that's pretty accurate lol

[wolf5252]

strange but great poem. however you should make a upbeat poem. times are tough but if you look on the bright side things might get better. but i did really enjoy the poem, just wished it didnt have a depressing vibe to it.

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

I will, I can't guarantee how good it will be, but I'll try for you.