Macbeth: Act 5 Scene 1 (Rewrite)

This was something I had to do for a class. I just need to know if it's good. And if I made it modern enough. As much as I can anyway.

Doctor: I’ve been up for two nights now. And have not seen her sleepwalking. When was the last time you saw her doing it?

 

Gentlewoman: Since her husband has left for war. I have watched her get out of bed, put on her night gown,  unlock her closet, take out some paper, fold it, write on it, read it even, and seal it up. Then she just got back into bed, And she was asleep the whole time.

 

Doctor: That’s crazy. You can’t be doing things like your awake, when your actually sleeping. When she acts like this. Does she say anything other then just moving things around and such?

 

Gentlewoman: Oh yes, But I can’t tell you

 

Doctor: I really need to know. It could help her.

 

Gentlewoman: I will tell no one. My lips are sealed. I am the only to hear what she said. And it will stay that way.

 

Lady Macbeth enters Holding her phone, the flash light feature turned on.

 

Gentlewoman: Look! There she is. This is what she does. I swear on my life, she out like a light. Watch her, but stay low.

 

Doctor: How did she get her phone?

 

Gentlewoman: It sits on the table next to her. She always has her phone on her. It’s how she functions.

 

Doctor: But her eyes are open.

 

Gentlewoman: Yeah, But she can’t see.

 

Doctor: She’s rubbing her hands. What’s up with that?

 

Gentlewoman: She does it all the time. It’s like she’s trying to wash her hands. Once, she did it for like, fifteen minutes.

 

Lady Macbeth: I can’t get it off.

 

Doctor: She’s speaking. You hear that? Let me write down what she says.

 

Lady Macbeth: (rubbing her hands) Come off. Come out already you damned stain. I commend you! �" Hell is murky! Nonsense, my lord, nonsense. You’re a soldier yet your scared? Why should we be scared? We can’t be blamed. But who would have thought the old fool had so much blood in his veins.

 

Doctor: Did you hear what she just said?

 

Lady Macbeth: The thane of Fife had a wife. Where is she now? What, will I never clean my hands of this? No more of that, my lord, no more. You’ll ruin everything by being afraid.

 

Doctor: Now see what you’ve done, you’ve heard someone you shouldn’t have.

 

Gentlewoman: She said something she shouldn’t have. Who knows what secrets she keeps.

 

Lady Macbeth: I still have the smell of blood on my hand. All the perfumes in the world could make it smell better. Oh my god!

 

Doctor: Her poor heart. She’s been through so much.

 

Gentlewoman: Even if you made me queen. I wouldn’t want to have a heart like that.

 

Doctor: Well, Well, Well.

 

Gentlewoman: I hope what she says is good, sir!

 

Doctor: This disease is well beyond my knowledge. But I have seen people sleepwalk who weren’t guilty.

 

Lady Macbeth: Watch your hands. Put on your nightgown. Don’t look so scared. Listen up, Banquo is dead. Buried six feet deep.

 

Doctor: Are you serious?

 

Lady Macbeth: To bed, to bed! There’s a knocking at the door. Come, come, give me your hand. What’s done can not be taken back. To bed, to bed!

 

Doctor: Is she just going back to bed now?

 

Gentlewoman: Yep, Right now.  

 

Doctor: Have you heard the rumors? Crazy acts will cause unnatural things to happen. People are a guilty and have messed up heads will telling their pillows of their sins at night. This woman needs a priest, more then me. God forgive us!  Watch out for her. Take dangerous objects away from her room. Keep a close eye on her. Good night. She has tired my mind and shocked my eyes. I have an opinion, but I wont tell you it.

Gentlewoman: Good night then doctor.   

Author's Note

http://nfs.sparknotes.com/macbeth/page_178.html Here is the link to the original text as well. Along side it is a translation. I would suggest reading this first. But please. Let me know what you think.