Insane?

I bite at my skin. 

Ripping it open. 

I taste blood in my mouth. 

And finally realize what I'm doing. 

But I don't stop. 

My mind feels like. 

It's buzzing. 

Like it's on that static channel. 

I feel tired. 

But not in the sleeping way. 

I'm not myself. 

Or maybe am I. 

Exactly that. 

I know I have issues. 

I think about hurting people. 

A lot. 

More then I think about doing it myself. 

So that's good right? 

But I seriously think about it. 

All parts of it. 

Should it worry me? 

Yes. 

Does it? 

No. 

I guess maybe. 

This is me. 

This is what I am to be. 

But I'll stick to keeping it in my writing. 

I don't like the idea of jail. 

I feel as if I'm leaning forward. 

But not moving at all. 

And my vision is blurred. 

Is this what it feels like? 

I kind of like it. 

I think I'll stay here.  

Author's Note

This makes no sense. But who said it had too?

Reviews

[Bluefire]

It does make sense to me. But I wouldn't call it insanity.
I think everyone has thoughts of hurting others, some are just more violent than most.
It's normal to feel tired, but not in that sleepy way when you become depressed or sad, and sometimes it's normal to cut or hurt yourself for relief.
But just because I think it's normal, doesn't mean it's who you are or that any of it is good for you or your body.
I do believe that writing and telling people about things and getting them off your chest is a great way to deal with the pain, much better than hurting yourself or anyone else.
Nice write, well done! ^^

[Kitten]

Thank yew.

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[jasonguinn789]

The first part of the poem, for me at least, wasn't very strong. It needs to be more "in the moment" more visual--could use more of the senses like taste, smell, etc. to really heighten that darker moment at the start.

The idea of the poem is interesting, but it doesn't really sound like a crazy person--if that was your goal. It sounds like someone trying to sound crazy and doing crazy things for attention rather than a person who is mentally deranged expressing his darker views and desires in a journal. The last part of the poem, was better written the other 80%.

If you want to make this poem better, you have to go darker, be more erratic in the descriptions, use more senses, and really dive into the mind of this unreliable narrator.

This is an okay start, but could benefit from some serious revision! Good luck and keep writing.

[Neshie]

I'm not sure if you are doing something like the thoughts of Toby or not.. If you are: Very well done. It's really in character and thought through. If not: this is very disturbing to read..

[Kitten]

I wasn't but it does sound like something that would come from his mind. Guess I'm better at being him then I thought..