For a contest (that is long past). Leave it up to you to interpret however you like
Frost’s kiss
As I lay there, Frost came for me, just as he promised. And he laid his chilling lips upon mine, forever claiming me as his companion in an inescapably numb world.
This is intensely chilling! I liked the imagery of the frost's kiss (chilling lips) I could feel the ice coldness of the connection like I was there. Well done!
Ohhh, chilling. It's short, but I think if it was to much longer then it would just get over-the-top. I really like the way you started the second sentence with 'And'. For me it emphasises it, makes it louder.
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