Wishing

Inspired by a poem I read last night

I run along the cement road

Wishing it was an endless plain

I stand in the shower

Wishing it was fresh rain

 

I rest under the shadow of the building

Wishing it were the great oak tree

I sit in a whirling airplane

Wishing to be a bird, forever free

 

I sleep under the blank ceiling

Wishing it was the starry sky

I feel the spinning of the fan

Wishing it was the wind’s sigh

 

I drink this sanguine water

Wishing it were sweet wine

I think of you, my dearest love

Wishing you were mine 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ophelia]

This is very melancholy, and I love it! It's almost as though you're saying "instead of industrialization, I want the sweeter things in life." And when you talk about how you wish your love was yours, it was like you were comparing him/her to all the beautiful and natural things in life. I really like this a lot!

[MyDearRobby]

ItS So cUtE,sHoRt AnD sWEeT!

[Jenn Gold]

I really like this. Though I do wish it was longer...but perhaps that is the beauty of it...simply short yet holding a lot of meaning. Very nice.

[oranges_melt]

aw, that's so cute, its very sweet, but if u can you just practice writing and using better adjectives but i thought it was really good =)