Season's Breath

Three haikus for each season

 

Summer

Days of burning sun

Raging like fiery passions

Will it ever end?

Waiting for coolness

Many restless, sleepless nights

Dreams of cold waters

Darkness falls, look out

See the lights, see those fireflies

Flickering like stars

 

Fall

A new cold wind blows

Bringing new shades of color

To the once-green leaves

A kaleidoscope

Beautiful red, brown, yellow

The waltz of colors

Life slowly ending

Fleeing to a death-like sleep

Waiting and hoping

 

Winter

The dance of white starts

Raining ice cold on the world

That is still, quiet

Glimmering crystals

Priceless jewels that fade slowly

Few moments to live

Freezing, chilling sigh

The cold that is always there

Warmth is almost here

 

 

Spring

A warm breath sweeps through

Stirring the long-dormant world

With its wings of green

Coat of ice melting

The frozen air becomes warm

Winter is no more

 

See those flowers bloom

Rivers flowing, birds singing

New life starts again

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

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... a scintillating haiku string ... incrediby inspiring and astonishingly vivid ... "days of burning sun" ... "dreams of cold water" ... "fireflies flickering like stars" ... amazingly expressive imagery ... gorgeous alliteration ... what a summer ... "a kaleidoscop" ... "the waltz of colours" ... "fleeing to a death-like sleep" ... are expressions and images that take fall into a surreal world ... the mark of a visonary poet ... one who paints on nature with words ... as much as nature paints on the poet's mind ... excellence incarnate ... "the dance of white starts" ... "glimmering crystals" ... "freezing, chilling sigh" ... are enthralling expressions ... a ballet of beautiful words and images on ice ... charming and epic ... a winsome winter ... "a warm breath sweeps through" ... "with its wings of green" ... "winter is no more" ... a heart-warming welcome to spring ... gentle and magical ... beautifully felt and written ... this haiku string is an ode to the form that celebrates it in all its glory and splendour ... exceptionally well written ... and exceptionally well presented ... thank you for writing this and thank you for sharing it ... this is an unforgettable feast for the soul ...

(serah)

[Maya Storm]

Love the style of writing and the arrangement of words, it's very unique.

[emmah]

this one is a treat to read! to travel through the seasons, transcend time and space, as a reader, with your outstanding poetry is a treat, indeed!

summer - and the scorching heat, the merciless sun, the "dreams of cold waters" that dot the "many restless, sleepless nights" - incredible! the "waiting for coolness", brilliant!

fall - the freshness of the "cold wind", the changing colors of the "once-green leaves" into "a kaleidoscope" of fascinating shades of "beautiful red, brown, yellow" - stunning! the cycles of old and new, the contrast of how the end, most of the time, brings with it, a new hope for the new - "waiting and hoping"!

winter - "the dance of white" - the first snow, all consuming and ever present - "Glimmering crystals" "Priceless jewels that fade slowly" - a stunning description of melting icicles - pure and beautiful.

spring - the delicateness of the spring breaking through the hardness of the winter - "Stirring the long dormant world", the transition of the white of winter into the "wings of green" - artistic and beautiful!

the endlessness of cycles and the exquisite beauty of all seasons shines through in this gorgeous haiku string!

[alesuriko]

The format is aesthetically pleasing, I like it. I could do without the colors but that's your choice as a writer. To me the words seemed powerful enough and descriptive enough that the color was excessive. The imagery was beautiful, however, and you did a marvelous job at accentuating each season's breath. It felt like the seasons were passing around me and adjusting my temperature to their particular atmosphere. Nicely done.

[MJ Durston]

Wow! Inventive, I like that you formatted the poem sort of like a ladder for each season, I also like the choice of colour for each one. It brings the poem alive. Sometimes there is a little too much focus on the display and not the poem itself, but you avoided that here. I really loved the poem!

Keep Writing,
Melissa

[Prateeksha Khot]

beautiful. I loved it. And congrats on winning the competition. you deserve it.

[Prateeksha Khot]

beautiful. I loved it. And congrats on winning the competition. you deserve it.

[Vain Apocalypse]

This group of haiku's history of winning awards is evidence of its quality. Its strength is obviously in the totality with which it captures the essence of the seasons.

References to temperature, restlessness and passions depict summer as a time of activity and oppressive heat. The fall is presented as a transition in color and as the time of hopeful preparation. The winter haikus regard white, cold, crystalline stillness. The spring haikus are about rejuvenation and a returning commotion.

It's a collage of well worded seasonal themes.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats a third time on your winning Haiku String

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats again on your winning haiku string.