I love you

Man...the title sounds so cliche...oh well, i hope you enjoy reading this :].

            I've been waiting all my life for this.

Tell me if you can do this for me.

I've been waiting, just for this one kiss,

Cuz' you and me were meant to be.

 

Baby forget about what they all say,

They don’t know you like I do.

Just hear me out, please stay.

I want to give you the world, I want to.

 

Forgive me, I’ve done you wrong,

I’ve turned into someone I’m not.

Our love has grown so strong,

Your love is all I got.

 

For all the pain I’ve had to endure,

The three words you once told me pulled me through,

The words you told me that time were,

“I love you”

 

Why don’t we stay right here,

Under the stars, not a person in sight.

You don’t have anything to fear.

I’ll carry you into the night.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Kloud_Nine]

Glad you said for me, the title is a bit cliche, but who cares, who looks at titles? I dont, so lets move on.

Basically if i were to write a review I'd only be repeating whats already been said so I'll just give you some advice. What makes love poems the unique and popular poems that they are is the imagry the author presents. People like to feel the butterflies in their stomachs when they read over a breath-taking line or stanza.

Good job

[Mindless Mindset]

It was EXCELENT! Very pure and passionate. A baeutiful feeling of being adored. Lovely ^^

[Raven Wilson]

Sensitive and cheesy...I love cheesy XD.
I liek the simplicity, one doesn't need an extensive use of vocabulary if they are writing from their heart, the words should just come, perfect as they lie.

[Chelsea (Jade)]

Very sensitve write. I LOVE IT!

[Anna]

Cheesy like a bsb love song!
But I loved it.
Sweet and simple like love should be.

I'd love to see you dig a little deeper. =]

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. I loved this.. really great flow and writing for one of your age!!! If I didn't see your age on your profile I would have thought someone a little older wrote this.. it is warm, beautiful and very heartfelt.. great format.. you have a gift .. definitely keep writing!!! =)