My Venus

i wrote this for my girlfriend....<3 Monica

Thou art my Venus

Mine goddess of love

You share with me to live

And to die here that of

 

You are my darling

My heavenly gift

An answer to prayer

That cometh so swift

 

I cry out to you

And you cry back to me

Tears filled with sad

Tears filled with glee

 

My heart to you

Locked in a chest

Forever may you keep it

And keep it your best

Reviews

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow you have an amazing talent and being so young! its amazing!

[A Wanderer of Dreams]

That was very beautiful and well written. Great read :)

[angel eyes]

great job

[SoulofManyFaces]

I am impressed...these words coming from a
13 year old:). This is a cute poem, but so mature.
These last lines are my favorite: My heart to you
Locked in a chest
Forever may you keep it
And keep it your best
....and so the bond is sealed.

[Crambo]

Aww, such a sweet poem with so much love. I really enjoyed this piece and I must say I'm impressed. I liked the ABCB rhyming pattern for each stanza. Nice and swift.

[Lilly]

this is very sweet and beautiful. i really love the flow and message you created through this piece.

FRIKIN AWESOME! :)