has some deep meaning, but don't feel bothered by not understanding.
With black eyes, the night stares down at me.
Shadows of past times, haunts this place.
And it just rains,
And pours on me,
Silver rain.
Leafless trees,
Empty, dead, infinite landscapes..
Smoking fire flowers.
And it's just pouring down,
Silver rain.
Shadows of past, haunting this place.
From distant lands I came from,
Infinite light held me in his arms
But, the sky went dark,
And the flames of stars got swallowed by the fog, and the monotone grayness..
Everything is so dark,
Blinding black.
With darkness, the night stares at me,
Shadows of the past haunt this place..
And it just keeps raining silver...
Nice work... the descriptions make it sound like an old war zone... dark memories and dark feelings of the past. These moments in life come and go. You'll find yourself doing fine, enjoying the way life is going and all of a sudden boom! A memory or a trigger of a memory comes and it consumes your mind. You expressed that feeling perfectly. I go through the same s**t... sometimes it can be a smell, a scenic view of something or just a complete sudden feeling of emptiness and you feel the pain of a past heartbreak. Nice work I enjoyed it :)
exactly!!!! sometimes, just a walk down the same road, can trigger it.
Thank you my friend :)
8 Years Ago
I used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same.. read moreI used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same as when I worked there... it triggers this sickening feeling in my stomach like I want to puke lol
Well if you want what I viewed in the work it leaves it rather open. It could be pain of war or a re.. read moreWell if you want what I viewed in the work it leaves it rather open. It could be pain of war or a real experience and dealing with it now or it could just be your view from within your mind. Nothing in the piece gave me any true direction of your inspiration beyond beautiful words. Sorry if it is not what you want.
8 Years Ago
no, reader's opinion, is EXACTLY what i want. :) thanks. :)
Its really well written. Gripping and full of imagery.
I feltlike it was about an abandoned place full of nightmares that the narrator wanted to avoid.
Nice work... the descriptions make it sound like an old war zone... dark memories and dark feelings of the past. These moments in life come and go. You'll find yourself doing fine, enjoying the way life is going and all of a sudden boom! A memory or a trigger of a memory comes and it consumes your mind. You expressed that feeling perfectly. I go through the same s**t... sometimes it can be a smell, a scenic view of something or just a complete sudden feeling of emptiness and you feel the pain of a past heartbreak. Nice work I enjoyed it :)
exactly!!!! sometimes, just a walk down the same road, can trigger it.
Thank you my friend :)
8 Years Ago
I used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same.. read moreI used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same as when I worked there... it triggers this sickening feeling in my stomach like I want to puke lol
Yeah, no problem. It sounds like a dark hate filled world to me about maybe your sexuality or someth.. read moreYeah, no problem. It sounds like a dark hate filled world to me about maybe your sexuality or something?
8 Years Ago
it's quiet a mind cracker, eh? lol.
well, I'm curious, what do you think. it's your opinion. .. read moreit's quiet a mind cracker, eh? lol.
well, I'm curious, what do you think. it's your opinion. (i wont bite if it's not it, so don't worry...lol)
8 Years Ago
My brain exploded.
8 Years Ago
lol. good, was aiming to make a cracker.. lol.
well, as for the dark world . getting warmer... read morelol. good, was aiming to make a cracker.. lol.
well, as for the dark world . getting warmer... lol
Seems like a place you used to be in and you're visiting it but it has a dark world feeling
8 Years Ago
even closer!!!! xD
I'll put it simple...
when i walked in my room tod.. read moreeven closer!!!! xD
I'll put it simple...
when i walked in my room today...
memories flooded my mind of my ex...and when he texted me... well, i got inspired. this, came out in like two minutes.
Amazing piece...
Leafless trees,
Empty, dead, infinite landscapes..
Smoking fire flowers.
And it's just pouring down,
Silver rain.
Shadows of past, haunting this place.
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