Silver rain

Silver rain

A Chapter by Dani The Unreviewed
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has some deep meaning, but don't feel bothered by not understanding.

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With black eyes, the night stares down at me. Shadows of past times, haunts this place. And it just rains, And pours on me, Silver rain. Leafless trees, Empty, dead, infinite landscapes.. Smoking fire flowers. And it's just pouring down, Silver rain. Shadows of past, haunting this place. From distant lands I came from, Infinite light held me in his arms But, the sky went dark, And the flames of stars got swallowed by the fog, and the monotone grayness.. Everything is so dark, Blinding black. With darkness, the night stares at me, Shadows of the past haunt this place.. And it just keeps raining silver...



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Author's Note

Dani The Unreviewed
if you read carefully, you should at least feel it... but don't worry if you don't. read again, and you will. if not? then guess.

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Nice work... the descriptions make it sound like an old war zone... dark memories and dark feelings of the past. These moments in life come and go. You'll find yourself doing fine, enjoying the way life is going and all of a sudden boom! A memory or a trigger of a memory comes and it consumes your mind. You expressed that feeling perfectly. I go through the same s**t... sometimes it can be a smell, a scenic view of something or just a complete sudden feeling of emptiness and you feel the pain of a past heartbreak. Nice work I enjoyed it :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

exactly!!!! sometimes, just a walk down the same road, can trigger it.
Thank you my friend :)
AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

I used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

sounds awful
...xD



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Oh how dark and frightening this place feels, kind of like my head right now. Thanks for putting this into words. Going through some terrible s**t right now, so this hits right at home.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
The constant usage of "silver rain" gives an even better effect and easier understanding of the situation to the reader. Great and deep write :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Silver rain..love the title. Beautiful poem. Full of meaning."With darkness, the night stares at me,
Shadows of the past haunt this place.. And it just keeps raining silver." The video ties in well with the theme. those dark reminders of the past, a special meeting place, a song, familiar words. Well expressed and written. Keep writing!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


The words created a very mysterious background.....My mind following those words again and again....Very well thought out and beautifully executed poetry....This is brilliant dear frnd.....

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
this was so unique and interesting. I found myself reading it again and I could place myself in the darkness. words were wonderfully crafted.

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
This is deep and gripping...great write I love the language for your symbolism.

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much
annalysiar

8 Years Ago

Thank you for letting me read it was a great poem
memories coming back as silver rain against the night, dark and bleak

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Beautifully written! I had to it a couple times and then I saw Aaron's review and everything clicked! Thank you for sharing. I wish I was better with metaphorical poetry!

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

thank you very much :)
I think that this is really well written. No words could express how deep the atmosphere feels when reading this, no really. This is great. (:

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
CiNtsaLis

8 Years Ago

You are most welcomed, Darling (:
Great piece, your words created a picture brought out the message with delicate ease. Keep up the good work!!

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Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :) what message exactly? what do you think?
Krizito

8 Years Ago

That there's always that haunting memory around. That shadow that's always there. T least that's wha.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

yep, that's about right :)

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