has some deep meaning, but don't feel bothered by not understanding.
With black eyes, the night stares down at me.
Shadows of past times, haunts this place.
And it just rains,
And pours on me,
Silver rain.
Leafless trees,
Empty, dead, infinite landscapes..
Smoking fire flowers.
And it's just pouring down,
Silver rain.
Shadows of past, haunting this place.
From distant lands I came from,
Infinite light held me in his arms
But, the sky went dark,
And the flames of stars got swallowed by the fog, and the monotone grayness..
Everything is so dark,
Blinding black.
With darkness, the night stares at me,
Shadows of the past haunt this place..
And it just keeps raining silver...
Nice work... the descriptions make it sound like an old war zone... dark memories and dark feelings of the past. These moments in life come and go. You'll find yourself doing fine, enjoying the way life is going and all of a sudden boom! A memory or a trigger of a memory comes and it consumes your mind. You expressed that feeling perfectly. I go through the same s**t... sometimes it can be a smell, a scenic view of something or just a complete sudden feeling of emptiness and you feel the pain of a past heartbreak. Nice work I enjoyed it :)
exactly!!!! sometimes, just a walk down the same road, can trigger it.
Thank you my friend :)
8 Years Ago
I used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same.. read moreI used to work in a jail for a year... sometimes I will get a wiff of something that smells the same as when I worked there... it triggers this sickening feeling in my stomach like I want to puke lol
Beautiful poetry, my dear brother. This indeed is very deep and metaphorical. You did a wonderful job ans used much imagery. Again, absolutely beautiful! Thank you for sharing :) rating: 100/100
This is much better than your other works. The picture changes slightly keeping the emotions writer wanted to share fresh over the course of reading. Couple of words are redundant and the poem could do without them but that's pretty much better.
I don't think the author's note is even necessary. If people can't feel this there asleep. The repetition helps to convey the message behind the words which are heavy as bricks. A poem well done.
Wow. I'm sure this has a very deep meaning that I could not even begin to understand, but the picture you painted with those words is phenomenal. I picture someone standing in the leftovers of a great catastrophe. I can't help but wonder what happened, but at least the rain is beautiful :)
This is a marvelous piece that is depicting tragedy. Its melancholic, but it's beautiful. It shows how people can be englufed by the past yet they keep on surviving. I loved it.
Makes me think of how s****y life is, but how it still goes on and people keep living. And how people will have something, then lose it. I love the words you've written with the video, It made it seem like a piece of something.
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