So, it's you again at my door,
One, who used to be here so often.
An always shape shifting,
Eternal illusion,
An escaped love butterfly,
On a pair of broken wings.
Fly, just keep flying on,
I'm afraid of going mad again,
So just let me forget you,
Before I hurt you again.
My opened arms an infinite maze,
My heart is frosty, hard as a rock,
Run away, while it's not too late.
Fly, just fly away.
Look, who starts this game,
Can loose only once, but for all.
Fly just fly away,
Before I hurt you again.
So just fly, just fly sky high.
The night stretches webs,
To catch you again,
Frosty my heart is.
So just fly away,
Run away, while you can.
Fly, just fly on,
Before you get hurt.
So just fly away.
Whoa... I'm amazed now.
I know the song, too.
But, I think it's not just pushing someone away, to avoid hurting them...
It's like a piece of your heart wants them all the best, and wants to see them enjoy a happy life... And the other piece going through the painful realization, that they have to get there, on their own. Because, -as it feels like- you think, you're incapable of giving that to them. Incapable, as in not strong, or smart enough.
And if I may, not only that you feel like being "not good enough"
But also as unnecessary weight, pulling them away, thus hurting them.
But, you know -should know - that it's not true.
You have always been an inspiration to me. Ever since I've read your works, and found the very deep meaning in even the simplest ones, ever since we're a couple ...
And, how many new people can thank you, for the warm welcome, and all the help you gave them.
Still, you write this, an eternal, internal struggle.
One side wanting this, the other wanting that.
Priceless write.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
it is just the truth. and I'm puzzled...was i really so obvious?
No, but unlike most people on here, I got to know you through your writing, and I know you really we.. read moreNo, but unlike most people on here, I got to know you through your writing, and I know you really well. I pay attention, when I read you, and I can understand all your words.
Still, I know you, but you're a great mystery, a puzzle, no one can solve.
I love you. ♥
I have to say how beautifully haunting this poem is! The verse describing the night as a web for catching is my favorite part of this because it reminds me of all those moments of regret and wanting them back, reliving them in order to fix it. It also means lost opportunities as well, but that's just me. As for the black butterfly, I did some research and could mean a representation of the soul, endurance, and change. I can see all of those meanings throughout your poem. Additionally, another interesting symbol of the butterfly is resurrection. Contrasting that with the color black (symbolizing death or emptiness) is interesting because it seems that resurrection(life is usually attached) with death creates a sort of in between--limbo. I know that people can live in that sort of limbo where there is no closure and I can see that in your poem. So basically, the narrator is stuck between searching for something and yet, pushing it away because of the raw pain that is felt. I can sense the remorse, anger, sadness, and unhappiness that is all bundled up together. It leaves a gray area of emptiness. It is amazing how deep your poetry can go into! This is a gem!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Yeah. my "poetry " is usually full of messages. but I'm so bad at it, that usually no one gets the p.. read moreYeah. my "poetry " is usually full of messages. but I'm so bad at it, that usually no one gets the point. so...idk. maybe I should just do everyone a favor and get the bloody hell out of here
8 Years Ago
Nonsense, I liked reading the poem. I took several English classes and read many styles of poetry. S.. read moreNonsense, I liked reading the poem. I took several English classes and read many styles of poetry. Stay awesome!
Your writing continues to astonish me. You are extremely talented, though I know you will deny it. Please never stop writing, my friend. You have much potential and have already become better than me! lol
Again, rating: 100/100 :)
I'm sorry but this made me want to cry but it's beautiful...
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
heh...then i did okay with it. thank you.
8 Years Ago
No need to thank me for the truth. You really are a great writer and beyond that a great human being.. read moreNo need to thank me for the truth. You really are a great writer and beyond that a great human being.
Beautiful song of sacrifice and love.
When you truely love someone, you make their happiness the priority...
Lovely emotive piece.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
exactly! even if it means letting go of them, when they just have to go on, because one feels like d.. read moreexactly! even if it means letting go of them, when they just have to go on, because one feels like dead weight to them. (like i often did, and do.)
8 Years Ago
It happens dear. Life makes you do such things. Such brave, selfless things..
Inspirational and very touching poem. Really like this poem, Danny. Deep emotion and expression Brings to my mind..a wisdom of having strong love for someone..sometimes it's better to love from afar. Loving them enough to let them go."Fly, just fly on, Before you get hurt. "So just fly away." As I read the music kinda made me choke up a bit. Well written. Keep writing.
Critique: For this line 'So, it's you again at my door, " I believe it should be a period.
I think you are supposed to have the next line first word lowercase since its still mid sentence "An always shape shifting, Eternal illusion, " *same thing for a few other instances*
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