Waste of your tears -rewritten

Meaning: my goodbye note to a few I love, should I disappear, without a trace. With the song included. It's on Hungarian the meaning is the same.

I pull the curtains apart, silent,
A chilly breeze touching my face.
You're sleeping, just keep dreaming.
Forget the night,
There's no fight,
Forget the slow melody of a sigh.
Forget that I love you,
Which I never told you.

The city is dirty,
No one's sweeping the streets,
Since long,
No one has time.
Still, it's beautiful.

The people just keep running,
And they don't see the kid,
Sitting in the corner.
He's greeting me,
Someone you never believed.

It's a shame, for all your tears,
Touch me, you'll see, I'm just your dreams.
A waste of tears, I am.

I'm not worth your tears,
I must go, can't wait,
Another world awaits me.
Awaiting its lost son.

God be with you,
I cannot wait,
Above the road,
Hovering,
Like a shining army,
And it takes and, buries me in itself.
Like the sea takes in the rain.

It's a waste of your tears,
Touch me, and you'll see...
I'm nothing but your dreams.
Don't cry for me,
Just let go,
I cannot wait,
I must go.

Whatever they say,
No matter how they speak,
No matter the volume,
Silence, all my songs become,
silence.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Meeks]

Love the last line. Whatever the volume, it becomes silence. Like chess pieces, though each has a vital position on the board, they're all stored together at the end.
Truth is beautiful, and there's nothing more to say.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

true. but i rather go with this... when you lost the game, then it doesn't matter where your pieces are. thank you :)

[Obscured by the Shadows]

The detail and emotion put into this has a very deep meaning and I love it so very much. Very good writing, I will gladly read more of your work!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Wow :) thank you :)

[Obscured by the Shadows]

My pleasure

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work buddy :)
"It's a waste of your tears,
Touch me, and you'll see...
I'm nothing but your dreams.
Don't cry for me,
Just let go,
I cannot wait,
I must go. "
That was my favorite stanza out of all of them. Really good imagery in the words and a powerful stanza it is! Good work!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you my friend :D

[McBear]

Herro dere danny :D Wellp one little critiqueeee I really liked this though :)

After a comma, use a lowercase letter. I know you know this ;) Well done though. This was great

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :D I'll correct it.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

there, all fixed. :)

[McBear]

Hehe. No problem bud

[Dani The Unreviewed]

i bet, you didn't know the meaning right away. but it's included in the description now. :)