A Free Verse For Nation and Country

Just a poem

Rusty blade nailed on the wall,
Glorious past, where are you buried?
We'll dig out our once proud country,
Torn nation,
Beautiful history.

Heavy storms attack the beautiful Hungarian Kárpát mountains,
And wild winds rage through the valleys.
I can feel its cold blow,
Raging power,
Flaming rage.

From east to west its fire burns,
So it will burn down what's evil to this nation.
Let this country rise with pride,
And we'll say long live the freedom, again, together.

Don't let a day pass,
The blacksmith shall work,
Swords we need once again,
Shining steel.
Don't let rust eat your blade,
So bitter, and beautiful it is these days, being Hungarian.

Author's Note

Any thoughts?

Reviews

[ANTO]

I think that there more than a dollop of poetic license employed here Danny.
There is a form of music here in Belfast that is colloquially called 'burn the buses' music.
It is hardcore Irish republican and fervently Nationalist in tone and content and has (or did in the past) the effect of 'making' (as much as people can be made to do anything lol) people who hear it and who are drinking want to go and burn the buses. Burn the buses is an unmbrella term for 'civil rioting'.

I think the lit that you refer to has a similar affect on your writing here. It does read like something from another century. I believe you have let your pen indulge in fantasy here that has its roots in the history of your proud nation. Nothing more. Creative writing is all.
AND.. you got people talking, which is always a good thing. :))

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thanks my friend :) i had a few of these written, a few weeks ago. lol

[Davidgeo]

While this writing read to me well, the message you seem to deliver condone hatred and violence as method for peace and new nation.

Wrong headed thinking. Is terrorism logical reasoning. Not inclusive, you seem desire those not like you be gone or dead. My friend that is terrorism. Truly I hope you grow up and out this circular violence of thought. These thoughts cause more harm, very little to zero good thing.

Sorry I cannot be aggreable review. Truly I do not believe your views accurate, you seem twisted distorted from too much wrong in your life. I will hold you in my prayers and hope for you to see the better world.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

No, i don't hate anyone... just check some of the old Hungarian literature... and you'll see why i used the motives i did. And yes, i agree, the negative treatment got to me, too much. at times, i let it take control. anyway, it's not one of those days. :)