A fallen soldier's story...

It's really really dark.

In the night,
With a dead knight,
Didn't win this fight,
Had too much of the fright.

Sword drawn,
Far away is dawn.

The world filled with evil...

A million terrors,
No one to blame for the errors.

They're all crawling out,
When you're off guard, no doubt.
The rest walked out,
You're on your own.

Don't give in, keep fighting,
For the amusement of others,
You can't win,
You wont be let in,
But the fools keep pushing you,
You gotta try,
Even you know, you'll die.
So why even try?

Are they really so blind?
Or is that word too kind?

Slash, cut, stab,
Still too many of them,
And you're still on your own...
All alone.
Where is the promised help?

Night covers the town,
In it's evil seas you'll drown,
Time to go down.

The Hell raisers are here,
Terror creeps all around,
Among the houses, of your hope,
In the forests of your darkest thoughts,
In the flowing rivers of blood,
In your body, in your head.
The horror creeps closer, can't you hear?
Your heartbeat, million per second.

Nobody walks the street,
A head hanging on a tree,
Fangs flashing in the dark,
Red eyes, scanning you,
They came with lust,
Not to be just.

The darkness swallowed the sun,
You better run,
Freez, going numb.

Death walking in the shadows,
Seeking revenge,
Taking what can never be his.
Life, the next, or this?

In the graves,
In the churches,
In the cities,
In the villages,
Walk, not home, not welcome.
No rest,
Failed every test.

No help, no hope, nothing.
A scream falling down,
Hitting the ground,
No one to hear your voice...
The cruelty continues,
As long as you live.

Faces look at you from behind masks,
Giving you impossible tasks.
Eyes used to be window to the soul,
Now they're windows to Hell.

Author's Note

Any thoughts?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem my friend. My father talked rarely of war. The Korean war and Vietnam were bad memories for him. Once when he was drunk. He told me he awoke and found the soldiers next him dead. His friend was killed. The China did this to mess-up the soldier who lived. It did. War is hell and sometime death is peace. A powerful poem my friend. Made me think about old dad and bad places. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you for reading, and the comment. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[RJ]

Awe this is amazing! I love your words... They're almost as magical as your voice o.o

[Sally Hope]

"Don't give in, keep fighting,
For the amusement of others."
A great satirical take, Danny. The cruelty of wars are all you see once the illusion is lifted. Great write, and keep writing.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

not exactly about war. not the traditional . but whatever. thanks for reading.

[Sally Hope]

I'm guessing you meant the internal wars we all face. Am I right?

[Dani The Unreviewed]

That too :) and more. ;) but im not expecting anyone to get it...it's not that obvious.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

like most of my dark poems...it has a mystery, that only i know of. and i like to keep it that way.

[Sally Hope]

We all do. That is what makes poetry so obscure. It means something different to each one of us :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

sounds just about right :)

[Creator]

I love love your dark poetry. How can you construct such powerful poems? You're the most amazing poet ever.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Honestly? I don't have a clue. Thanks :-)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work... definitely a dark piece but the descriptions in this write are perfect. You created a perfect image of the entire scene... nice work buddy!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you very much

[B]

Waw
Danny Boy
You are such a talented soul
The imagery here
and your use of words
Its captivating
and dark yet so strong

The fight through it gives hope for humanity
to never surrender or bow down to anything
To be their own
through life and death

Bravo
I miss you like crazy

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hope? who am i to give hope to anyone? i'm just feelin like im put in a impossible situation.. anyway thank you :-D and i was off for a long time, cuz i was bussy with "life"

[Insight "MH"]

I really felt the fright and pictured the night creeping on me, but fortunately i was able see the light not as that poor soldier who didn't :)

Thanks for a wonderful poem .

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for the read :-)

[Kyline Freed]

This poem is so powerful and you can tell that aa lot of feeling were supposed to be shown. This poem is long but you stayed on track with the same topic so well!!! Great Job xD

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Just like the others wrote, this poem is fully charged with power. I'm not one into this kind of genre, but my brother is and he loved this poem. As for me this is inspiring, I tend to write of fantasy worlds and their battles, and this just reminded me of a character I have. I like the last lines, they're very true. And that's what I love about your poems, they always have truth written in them.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[Max]

I love this, extremely well written! Very dark, but also very powerful. I'm not really sure how to describe the actual meaning.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Lol no worries. Thank you :)

[Max]

You are always welcome Danny :) By the way... Did you block Satan? That guy is a total lunatic. Stay away from him.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I know he is. I was about to read some writing from him, and I regretted it in the same second. After all that utopic nonsense he piled up, he wrote some s**t about how wicked he is, and the saddest thing, that people keep falling for his lies. And watch this... I was told to leave him alone, I mean, we're talking about a psycho!
Even if not, he's still full of s**t, and sadly, people keep buying it. The egoist boasts of himself, like he was the ruler of the f*****g world. Come on dude, grow up.

[Max]

Yeah, that's why I blocked him. He is not sane...at all. It is one thing to write, and another to call himself the devil, and say that he rules the world.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Lol. Eh, my life is fucked up enough without him around, dragging me down. Hell, he's just too full of himself to see reality. Just cuz he thinks he understood the meaning of a few songs, he thinks that he's the devil. I mean...is this guy serious?

[Max]

You can say that again. I'm so happy you did that. Not because I like it when people fight... I don't like that. The deal with him is different, I do not classify the likes of him under the tag "people". They are stupid, and extremely full of themselves.

On the other hand, you are another gorgeous young boy, who has so much talent, so much to say. You must focus on that. You should be loving your youth, living it while it lasts. We have the future, we are the future. We are meant to keep going, and leave the likes of that lunatic behind. They only slow us down, they are simply fools. Their words are simply empty threats, made out of their helplessness. They always criticize everything, but they consider themselves perfect.

The likes of that guy are the past, but they can't accept it, they are just jealouse about you, and want to pull you down, so they can take your place. That is how they see life.

You focus on going forward in life, and leave those shitholes for their kind.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Wow... Someone's angry...lol. Thank you very much. :)

[Max]

Yeah, I am. He was messing with you, and you are my friend. On the other hand, he is just another, helpless, extremely mad, with extremely outdated thinking, mad man. He does not deserve your attention. Let him keep spitting his poison. It will all fly back at him. His helplessness is the source of his madness, and his end. You need to forget satan forever, and instead, you should start worrying about what you are going to do with your boyfriend, when you see him on saturday. I mean, make some plans. Your boy deserves the best you can do for him. Think about those who really want to help you, and those who love you Danny.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I am. Thanks for your support. :)

[Max]

You don't have to thank me. :) You are welcomed in my heart, in my home, in my friendship. You are a true friend Danny. You have done much more for me, I think this is the least I can do.

Remember, stay away from that guy. He's not worthy of your attention. He thinks he's god, but he's just another worm.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Don't worry about it :) and yeah, i know... Lol. Nice comparison... Lol.

[Max]

Yeah, I couldn't find any other words to express my disgust towards people who keep trying to pull my best friend down. You're awesome, don't let anyone say otherwise.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks. I think i wont. :)