A memory
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Dani The Unreviewed
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A pair of blue eyes,
Brighter than the skies,
Stare in my cries,
As my soul dies.
A pair of ears,
Listen to my prayers,
Hear it drop, a tear.
As my hope turns into fear.
A face,
Worth more than the ace,
Takes up all space,
In my mind,
His blonde hair makes me blind.
His words, ever so kind.
His arms,
Warm hugs.
His lips,
Sweet kiss.
© 2016 Dani The Unreviewed
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Any thoughts?? i'm curious.
Featured Review
As always your poems are very lovely. I like your style, it's different, it's yours. And I understand you, everyone has their own way of expressing themselves through their writing. Reviews serve as a way of helping you as writer see the mistakes you don't see yourself, not to correct your style. I think all writers know this, we don't like to be told to change our writing style. That's another thing I like about your poems, they reflect how wonderful your mind is. Great poem! Don't change and keep writing in your own way! :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
thank you very much :-)
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Beautiful poem Danny. Expression and emotion are deep. You have a special way of writing love poems that others can relate to. Good job. Keep writing.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Beautiful poem Danny. Expression and emotion are deep. You have a special way of writing love poems that others can relate to. Good job. Keep writing.
This was beautiful man :) Well done
Posted 9 Years Ago
This was beautiful man :) Well done
9 Years Ago
yea...WAS is right. thanks for the read.
wow, this is amazing, love the poem!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
wow, this is amazing, love the poem!!
9 Years Ago
Thank you ::)
9 Years Ago
welcome!!
-Silver
you are really talented .... great poetry .... your poetry just keep me reading more and more !!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
you are really talented .... great poetry .... your poetry just keep me reading more and more !!!
9 Years Ago
thank you very much :)
Your perfect love
in rhyme
so endearing and close to the heart
Posted 9 Years Ago
Your perfect love
in rhyme
so endearing and close to the heart
As always your poems are very lovely. I like your style, it's different, it's yours. And I understand you, everyone has their own way of expressing themselves through their writing. Reviews serve as a way of helping you as writer see the mistakes you don't see yourself, not to correct your style. I think all writers know this, we don't like to be told to change our writing style. That's another thing I like about your poems, they reflect how wonderful your mind is. Great poem! Don't change and keep writing in your own way! :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
As always your poems are very lovely. I like your style, it's different, it's yours. And I understand you, everyone has their own way of expressing themselves through their writing. Reviews serve as a way of helping you as writer see the mistakes you don't see yourself, not to correct your style. I think all writers know this, we don't like to be told to change our writing style. That's another thing I like about your poems, they reflect how wonderful your mind is. Great poem! Don't change and keep writing in your own way! :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
thank you very much :-)
Everything here is what first comes to mind when people think romance. At least when I think of it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Everything here is what first comes to mind when people think romance. At least when I think of it.
9 Years Ago
Yeah. Thank you :)
You hit the mark there. You got the eye's, the ear's, and the mouth on this one. And it is what's said that still says there still there for you. :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
You hit the mark there. You got the eye's, the ear's, and the mouth on this one. And it is what's said that still says there still there for you. :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Yes. :) thank you. :)
AMAZING! And I totally get the line
"His blonde hair makes me blind.
His words, ever so kind. "
It is so deep!
Keep writing!
I LOVE YOU POETRY! *_*
Posted 9 Years Ago
AMAZING! And I totally get the line
"His blonde hair makes me blind.
His words, ever so kind. "
It is so deep!
Keep writing!
I LOVE YOU POETRY! *_*
9 Years Ago
Thank you very much.
this is so intriguing to me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
this is so intriguing to me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
9 Years Ago
Great. Thanks. :)
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