Emergency exit

Thanks for reading:)

The net of night,
Is looming, giving me the fright.
So, where to go? Left, or right?
This is not a fair fight.

As the demons come,
Many give in, and say "I'm done".
The evil is now set free,
It roams the earth,
Its face, and beneath the dirt.
No escape. Everyone's hurt.

The emergency light,
The lift going too high.
Look, it burns. I mean the sky.
Am I sure? I don't wanna die?
Die? Not? Why?
But where can I fly?

The emergency exit,
That does it.

Awake,
Looming presence, of evil.
The intruder is nowhere.
It was just another nightmare.

A single thought runs across.
"Good mornin you b*****d"
I think...
As my soul begins to sink.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading. :) Meaning?

Reviews

[Creator]

Well, Danny, here is what I think.
This is a poem about trying to run away from something. Something you consider very bad, or maybe even evil. You wrote a very good poem, but I must note that it could use another touch of your hand here and there. Just little details, to make it more clear. I realise that to convey the meaning, you had to write a poem that is in the state of chaos. Well, there are a few things you could add or remove, or just rephrase. Like, how does the lift going too high come to the burning sky? Please, don't be bothered by my honesty. I really like this poem. Nice job my young friend.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Exactly! now thats what i call constructive criticizm. Thank you so much! :)

[Creator]

You are welcome :) I'm off to read more from you. This was awesome. You must keep writing, for the pleasure of readers like myself. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks, and i will. :)

[Creator]

After reading through more of your poetry, I have to say: No my friend, thank you. :) And please do keep writing. I would be very upset to see such a shining, young talent like you being wasted.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

That is really nice of you to say :)

[PoeticChico]

I am not sure why, but I keep reading it over and over and I keep thinking to myself: "To live, you must die. To die, you must live" I feel like the emergency door could lead you to either way. I also want to interpret that last part as a dream within a dream. You know you never really woke up, you dreamed you woke up but it never happened, like inception. I loved this poem but personally I would never like to have this dream…

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yeah, i had that dream a few times...false wake ups...you think you're awake...but you're not.

[Lizardo]

Danny this is a really interesting poem, for me I think it could be about someone who's thinking of dying or is trying to run away from its reality, that's why it sees the emergency exit to scape.
I like this one Danny, awesome poem, 100% :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Wow!! thank you so much :) yeah, that is one of the meanings...but i wrote this after another night of sleep paralysis. Thanks for the input. :)

[Lizardo]

You're welcome

[A writer]

I think that the meaning of the emergency exit, (in this case atleast) is waking up from a nightmare. Did I get it right? Either way, powerful, and dark poems like this remind me, why you are the best when it comes to writing dark poems. Don't get me wrong... To me, you are number one poet/writer. No matter what you write, it is always awesome to read. Love you Danny boy. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Exactly! Thank you :)