I'll be...

Thanks for reading :) any thoughts are welcome, as ALWAYS. :)

God abandoned you,
Fate plays its dirty games,
Settin free the blood in your veins.

I'll be your lord,
You blindly follow,
I'll be the one that cares,
Unheard prayers, no more.
I'll be the hope,
The rope, when you fall deep.
I'll be the fire,
In the cold of night,
I'll be your light,
When everything is dark.
You, the devil will not stalk.
No more pain,
I'll be the flames in your heart,
I'll be the the moon,
When you are the sun.

Author's Note

Any thoughts are welcome :) thanks for readin :)

Reviews

[Not here]

i saw what you commented on my poem and sorry i havent been getting to your read requests lately, ill always get to them eventually. anyways, i think this poem fits in really well with the rest of your Love Poems collection. keep it up and ill keep reading

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh...okay :) i tell that to anyone who keeps sendin them, but is not takin them for a very long time... Anyways, sorry if i was rude. And thanks :)

[Not here]

no problem. its totally understandable

[RJ]

This is really good :) I hope you do realize how good you are. And I'm not just saying that cuz I'm your girlfriend. You really are talented you just need to find inspiration :D And if you can't just write about a pineapple ^_^

[Dani The Unreviewed]

good? me? then where are the readers? lol. ok. I'll write about pineapple. hahahahaha

[RJ]

The readers are waiting for you to become alive and write *giggles and twirls* let happiness life away the darkness and just write... Viva la viva by Coldplay is a good song for that

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. I did write. .

[RJ]

Yeah but that wasnt about you being happy. I'm not the only one who wants you to be happy. And normal humans try to avoid sadness... Im glad we aren't normal (I'm hyper btw)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. I'm not depressed.. &I write about whatever I want. if it's good, it'll be read, if not then it's no good

[Celie Rose]

Danny, another beautiful piece.."God abandoned you, I'll be your lord," I feel you. Love the honesty, expression and emotion. Keep writing, you are doing a great job.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you very much!

[McBear]

Hey buddy. I made a few grammar edits for you. It was very magical though.

God abandoned you.
Fate plays its dirty games,
Setting free the blood in your veins.

I'll be your lord,
You blindly follow.
I'll be the one that cares.
Unheard prayers, no more.
I'll be the hope.
The rope, when you fall deep.
I'll be the fire,
In the cold of night.
I'll be your light,
When everything is dark.
You, the devil will not stalk.
No more pain.
I'll be the flames in your heart,
I'll be the the moon,
When you are the sun.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you :)

[McBear]

My pleasure buddy

[Shah Sabia]

Magical :)
"I'll be the one that cares".
"I'll be your light when everything is dark".
"I'll be the moon, when you are the sun".
Quoted my favourite lines :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[Shah Sabia]

You're always welcome :)

[E G TEN]

Hello Dan, nicely done, your choices of words are always
interesting, " ill be your rope when you fall deep" love that line..
Good Job, Thanks.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[Gee]

There for you.Some really good lines in this,nice Danny

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Sorry...i'm a bit late with this...the previous comment didn't show up... Thank you soooo very much :)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work buddy :) "I'll be your light, when everything is dark." Deep words my friend

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

A beautiful piece Danny. I'm adding this to all my library shelves. A beautiful poem about caring for someone. You are the best writer ever!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

You are always welcome :)