Staring in the eyes of darkness
A Chapter by Dani The Unreviewed
 thanks for readin. 
In the eyes,
That stare, from behind the cries,
They stare back at me,
A never ending circle,
Why did the sky turn purple?
Or is it just a dream?
Maybe a nightmare?
In the black night, sparkling flares,
Seems like someone still dares,
To hope they get saved,
But will anyone care?
Hopes die, with the sparks they fly,
And turn into smoke,
That was all for hope.
The epidem alarm is screaming...
The noise stretched out long,
Climbing up,
And slowly going down.
The infection now spread,
The world dead,
Hey kid, where's your dad?
It feels like dread.
Or am I just dead?
Its fight for ourselves,
Free for all, stand up and fall.
A moment wasted,
Someone's scull busted,
Jesus!
God!
Allah!
They scream,
Before they explode into cream.
Welcome to a never ending dream,
Or is it just a nightmare?
Another, from the many,
That we all call reality.
© 2016 Dani The Unreviewed
Author's Note
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So you read it all the way. Thanks. What do ya think, about the meaning?
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The poem create many meaning and thoughts.
"The infection now spread,
The world dead,
Hey kid, where's your dad?
It feels like dread.
Or am I just dead?
Its fight for ourselves,
Free for all, stand up and fall. "
Had the feel of war and struggle. I did like the honest tone leading to the true ending. No-one will win with violence and war as the world lead. Powerful thoughts left the reader with many things to think about. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah, i see what people go through in a war zone... All the more, since our country and the neighbor.. read moreYeah, i see what people go through in a war zone... All the more, since our country and the neighboring countries are being flooded by people, running away from war, from inhuman circumstances... More than a thousand people are caught crossing the border illegaly every single day. I see entire families, kids, parents, young and old. I feel sorry for them... But then again, europe can't solve all of the world's problem. That's why, i keep writing, and writing, for peace. Those people lost their homes, they lost their hopes, and now they come here... While we can help some of them, we can't help everyone.... And it would be better for all, if they could stay in their homeland, safe, and sound, with their friends and families. But the west is trigger happy, and keep the warmachine going.
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9 Years Ago
I was a soldier. I saw the old countries before their great cities destroyed. War had no conscious. .. read moreI was a soldier. I saw the old countries before their great cities destroyed. War had no conscious. Women, old people and children pay for the hate of man. Not only the USA support war. Rich Arabic countries share money and guns. A mess-up Middle East made them forget. There are countries swimming in wealth and do not support them. Time to bring the Soldiers home and rebirth the homeland of the homeless. Middle East fix own problems. There is wealth that can be use to rebuilt. I pray for better day. No-one win in war.
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9 Years Ago
I didn't only mean the U.S.A when i said "west". And i know that the us says they want to eradicate .. read moreI didn't only mean the U.S.A when i said "west". And i know that the us says they want to eradicate terrorist groups, and keep peace... But do ask a few people, who live there, and ask who is the terrorist? the us does somethin instead of Nothin... Is it better or worse than stayin out of it all? who knows. But i do know, that the presence of soldiers are really not helpful in resolving the situation. The leaders of the people who live there, should be left to clean up, but since most of the world helped messing it all up, it is everyone's duty, to help them. But, i say again, bullets flying around, is not the solution. You can't keep peace with guns. As for their wealth... Oil wont be around for too long...so they better start using it, for the right reasons, before it all runs dry.
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9 Years Ago
I was a Soldiers. Soldier don't bring peace. In 1994. The L.A riots. My division was send to L.A loa.. read moreI was a Soldiers. Soldier don't bring peace. In 1994. The L.A riots. My division was send to L.A loaded with ammo and told to kill and stop the riots. I had more ammo than in the war area. Big government want us to fight between each other. Why do the peace-keeper like Martin Luther Kind get murdered. No profit in peace. He was seeking peace and equality. Middle East don't need the west. Poor leadership sponsored by the contractors. When the poor and meek work together toward peace. Can happen?
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9 Years Ago
I never said they need the west. But the west helped to mess everything up. And lately they work on .. read moreI never said they need the west. But the west helped to mess everything up. And lately they work on messing up the conflicts in ukrain even more... They helped mess up the conflicts in Yugoslavia, and they ended up, bombing it. But... Here's the twist! they bombed the areas, where the minorities lived...creating even more chaos. Now the serbs and croatians consider each other as sworn enemies. And the hungarian minorities living on the territories of the former yugoslavia... Well, they are hated by everyone. But another twist is, that Serbia, got a huge piece from our country after the first world war ended. Romania also took a huge bite, so did slovakia, and a few more. There a lot of hungarians in ukrain too, thereor, i am concerned about the conflicts there. The truth is, that before the first world war, Hungary was three times bigger than it is now...two thirds of territories taken... Two thirds of land, that were ours for more than a millenia. Again, i don't believe that we humans have ownership of the lands we live on...but, it is still cruel, and i still hate that cursed peace contract, that sliced my country to pieces. How does it all come together? simple... By that, many countries have hungarian minorities... And most of them hate us, generally. Not just us, but almost all minorities. Some even managed to create conflicts between those minorities... And by that...my people suffer. Not just mine, but all of them. And the west helped to fuel that hatred even more. Anyway, it's a very long story.
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9 Years Ago
I understand. I watched the struggle unfolded.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah, it is nasty, over complicated with stinking lies of politicians. I better leave it all alone, .. read moreYeah, it is nasty, over complicated with stinking lies of politicians. I better leave it all alone, before i go "missing" lol. Anyway, russia didn't really help it either... But again, it seems too complicated for my mind. So lets leave it at that. If humanity was smart, then we'd put aside all the so called differences... But humanity is stupid, and it's becoming even more stupid.
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9 Years Ago
I agree my friend. A confuse race can be controlled by the media. I like the old quote. "If you dumb.. read moreI agree my friend. A confuse race can be controlled by the media. I like the old quote. "If you dumb-side the people. You can control them. Time for all people to be pissed off. Poor leadership will lead us to a bad ending. New weapons are dangerous and scary.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah...i mean, what happens when russia and the west get pissed off at each other...for good... and .. read moreYeah...i mean, what happens when russia and the west get pissed off at each other...for good... and then it's nuke time... End of the world as we know it. Well, it wont be that fast...it will bring unimaginable suffering, before the end... So...the "global society" must do something, to stop it all, dead in the tracks, before the situation gets completely out of hand. When it does... It's free for all.
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9 Years Ago
And, unfortunately, that is only one example. I hate, and hate violence. It brings nothing good...fo.. read moreAnd, unfortunately, that is only one example. I hate, and hate violence. It brings nothing good...for anyone. Life is not given, to be ended by human hands.
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9 Years Ago
I have been telling people. If we don't change. It will be a "Mad Max" world. Old movie could be ne.. read moreI have been telling people. If we don't change. It will be a "Mad Max" world. Old movie could be new world.
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9 Years Ago
The saddest thing about that, is that it is true! sometimes i wonder, how long is humanity going to .. read moreThe saddest thing about that, is that it is true! sometimes i wonder, how long is humanity going to be as dumb, as it is now... Forever...i guess.
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9 Years Ago
You are right. I have been saying for many years. Will take a great city to die for us to learn. All.. read moreYou are right. I have been saying for many years. Will take a great city to die for us to learn. All life is precious.
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Wow... Danny, this is not just dark and gloomy but deeply woven array of thoughts. A beautiful personification of sadness and emptiness...
There are many lines that jump off the screen and touches the readers..
I loved the plot and flow but I especially liked the end. Violence can never result in peace.
Amazing work dear!
Going to my favourites' list!
Kudos!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
wow. :-) thanks :D
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8 Years Ago
You are very welcome!
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The poem create many meaning and thoughts.
"The infection now spread,
The world dead,
Hey kid, where's your dad?
It feels like dread.
Or am I just dead?
Its fight for ourselves,
Free for all, stand up and fall. "
Had the feel of war and struggle. I did like the honest tone leading to the true ending. No-one will win with violence and war as the world lead. Powerful thoughts left the reader with many things to think about. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah, i see what people go through in a war zone... All the more, since our country and the neighbor.. read moreYeah, i see what people go through in a war zone... All the more, since our country and the neighboring countries are being flooded by people, running away from war, from inhuman circumstances... More than a thousand people are caught crossing the border illegaly every single day. I see entire families, kids, parents, young and old. I feel sorry for them... But then again, europe can't solve all of the world's problem. That's why, i keep writing, and writing, for peace. Those people lost their homes, they lost their hopes, and now they come here... While we can help some of them, we can't help everyone.... And it would be better for all, if they could stay in their homeland, safe, and sound, with their friends and families. But the west is trigger happy, and keep the warmachine going.
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9 Years Ago
I was a soldier. I saw the old countries before their great cities destroyed. War had no conscious. .. read moreI was a soldier. I saw the old countries before their great cities destroyed. War had no conscious. Women, old people and children pay for the hate of man. Not only the USA support war. Rich Arabic countries share money and guns. A mess-up Middle East made them forget. There are countries swimming in wealth and do not support them. Time to bring the Soldiers home and rebirth the homeland of the homeless. Middle East fix own problems. There is wealth that can be use to rebuilt. I pray for better day. No-one win in war.
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9 Years Ago
I didn't only mean the U.S.A when i said "west". And i know that the us says they want to eradicate .. read moreI didn't only mean the U.S.A when i said "west". And i know that the us says they want to eradicate terrorist groups, and keep peace... But do ask a few people, who live there, and ask who is the terrorist? the us does somethin instead of Nothin... Is it better or worse than stayin out of it all? who knows. But i do know, that the presence of soldiers are really not helpful in resolving the situation. The leaders of the people who live there, should be left to clean up, but since most of the world helped messing it all up, it is everyone's duty, to help them. But, i say again, bullets flying around, is not the solution. You can't keep peace with guns. As for their wealth... Oil wont be around for too long...so they better start using it, for the right reasons, before it all runs dry.
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9 Years Ago
I was a Soldiers. Soldier don't bring peace. In 1994. The L.A riots. My division was send to L.A loa.. read moreI was a Soldiers. Soldier don't bring peace. In 1994. The L.A riots. My division was send to L.A loaded with ammo and told to kill and stop the riots. I had more ammo than in the war area. Big government want us to fight between each other. Why do the peace-keeper like Martin Luther Kind get murdered. No profit in peace. He was seeking peace and equality. Middle East don't need the west. Poor leadership sponsored by the contractors. When the poor and meek work together toward peace. Can happen?
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9 Years Ago
I never said they need the west. But the west helped to mess everything up. And lately they work on .. read moreI never said they need the west. But the west helped to mess everything up. And lately they work on messing up the conflicts in ukrain even more... They helped mess up the conflicts in Yugoslavia, and they ended up, bombing it. But... Here's the twist! they bombed the areas, where the minorities lived...creating even more chaos. Now the serbs and croatians consider each other as sworn enemies. And the hungarian minorities living on the territories of the former yugoslavia... Well, they are hated by everyone. But another twist is, that Serbia, got a huge piece from our country after the first world war ended. Romania also took a huge bite, so did slovakia, and a few more. There a lot of hungarians in ukrain too, thereor, i am concerned about the conflicts there. The truth is, that before the first world war, Hungary was three times bigger than it is now...two thirds of territories taken... Two thirds of land, that were ours for more than a millenia. Again, i don't believe that we humans have ownership of the lands we live on...but, it is still cruel, and i still hate that cursed peace contract, that sliced my country to pieces. How does it all come together? simple... By that, many countries have hungarian minorities... And most of them hate us, generally. Not just us, but almost all minorities. Some even managed to create conflicts between those minorities... And by that...my people suffer. Not just mine, but all of them. And the west helped to fuel that hatred even more. Anyway, it's a very long story.
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9 Years Ago
I understand. I watched the struggle unfolded.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah, it is nasty, over complicated with stinking lies of politicians. I better leave it all alone, .. read moreYeah, it is nasty, over complicated with stinking lies of politicians. I better leave it all alone, before i go "missing" lol. Anyway, russia didn't really help it either... But again, it seems too complicated for my mind. So lets leave it at that. If humanity was smart, then we'd put aside all the so called differences... But humanity is stupid, and it's becoming even more stupid.
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9 Years Ago
I agree my friend. A confuse race can be controlled by the media. I like the old quote. "If you dumb.. read moreI agree my friend. A confuse race can be controlled by the media. I like the old quote. "If you dumb-side the people. You can control them. Time for all people to be pissed off. Poor leadership will lead us to a bad ending. New weapons are dangerous and scary.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah...i mean, what happens when russia and the west get pissed off at each other...for good... and .. read moreYeah...i mean, what happens when russia and the west get pissed off at each other...for good... and then it's nuke time... End of the world as we know it. Well, it wont be that fast...it will bring unimaginable suffering, before the end... So...the "global society" must do something, to stop it all, dead in the tracks, before the situation gets completely out of hand. When it does... It's free for all.
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9 Years Ago
And, unfortunately, that is only one example. I hate, and hate violence. It brings nothing good...fo.. read moreAnd, unfortunately, that is only one example. I hate, and hate violence. It brings nothing good...for anyone. Life is not given, to be ended by human hands.
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9 Years Ago
I have been telling people. If we don't change. It will be a "Mad Max" world. Old movie could be ne.. read moreI have been telling people. If we don't change. It will be a "Mad Max" world. Old movie could be new world.
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9 Years Ago
The saddest thing about that, is that it is true! sometimes i wonder, how long is humanity going to .. read moreThe saddest thing about that, is that it is true! sometimes i wonder, how long is humanity going to be as dumb, as it is now... Forever...i guess.
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9 Years Ago
You are right. I have been saying for many years. Will take a great city to die for us to learn. All.. read moreYou are right. I have been saying for many years. Will take a great city to die for us to learn. All life is precious.
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Oh my God! From where do you take such power? I love this poem, adding it to my favorites.
The description of all cruelties that come with war, are described perfectly. In this piece, I see a lot of stuff that would come with modern warfare. Also, I see the number one weapon of terrorists... Suicide bombers. They been killing people, and spreading terror all over the world. This piece is so well written, that you could say that you actually lived all of that, and came here to tell the story. Awesome, powerful write as always my friend. Onehundred points.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
You are always welcome :)
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The world is in anarchy and humans are at war with nature too. A nice writeIM
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you :) sorry i'm so late with this...i somehow forgot to comment...?
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Pretty cool
it kinda reminds me of a world war one and world war two tribute. kinda like a solders view of life. you can see the difference in reality views. its kinda like seeing the world for the first time and they hate it. its cool and entrenching. really well written. ^-^
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you :) i was tryin to show how ugly wars really are. Anyways, thanks for the input. i'm always.. read moreThank you :) i was tryin to show how ugly wars really are. Anyways, thanks for the input. i'm always happy to see what others think.
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9 Years Ago
anytime its entertaining to read
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pretty surreal
very atmospheric with this one IM
-Dream
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
It kinda is... Thanks for readin :)
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Awesome piece! I assume with the "In the black night, sparkling flares" we are talking about war? It's a deep write my friend... good work :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Yep. Thanks for readin :)
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war, the purple skies , the screams, the lives lost ...suicide bomb... so sad that this is a reality! Brilliant write Ethan!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Exactly. thanks for reading :)
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The meaning? It can mean so many things, but by knowing of the way you write I would say it is about endless war and its consequences. I'm sure you know enough about history to know that wars have gone on since groups of cavemen threw rocks at each other...for what? Wars based on religious beliefs, over land parcels...over hatred? Why do we do it? If you can ever find out the answer to that please let me know. Great piece of writing. take care...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Why? simple. Humanity is the ugliest beast out there. Thanks for reading :)
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The moment you realize that the people who are meant to support
and give you hope are just cowardly running in the shadow
It is scary
but a life changing second
you understand and fully feel the presence of god
Telling you hey
I got this one
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thanks for readin. :)
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9 Years Ago
As for god...nope... God is nowhere around my life. Anyways, i wrote this about war.
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