Great write! Lot's of emotion in this piece, I can tell that you're writing from your own experience, the analogies you used were awesome and the vocabulary was refined. The end came off as a cliff hanger of sorts, but it also seems as if it signifies the abrupt end of a relationship. Awesome job!
I am enjoying your love poems. Strong emotion, devotion and expression. You write such great love poems. Another part of you. Well written. Keep writing Danny.
This poem is rather cute. Very well written, I could clearly feel your devotion to your boyfriend. Awesome poem. I really have no suggestions on how to make it better, because it is as good as it gets. Keep writing my friend. :)
Great write! Lot's of emotion in this piece, I can tell that you're writing from your own experience, the analogies you used were awesome and the vocabulary was refined. The end came off as a cliff hanger of sorts, but it also seems as if it signifies the abrupt end of a relationship. Awesome job!
Can I just tell you I love this? The poem was great, but my boyfriends eyes are blue so when you mentioned that color specifically my heart turned in my chest and allowed me to connect to the poem a little bit more. I love this also because of the message, the poem is rather sad. You captured gain and loss so perfectly. When a person saves you from the world itself then just disappears from your life it's hard to cope with and it feels like you lost a piece of yourself. Nice poem.
I've actually had my life touched by an angel; don't know if it was a cutie but it didn't much matter I was just so thankful. It made me find a whole bunch more religion than I had previously thought possible. Oh..so you WEREN'T being literal? Never mind, nice write. take care...dan