When you take a step in,
The hallway sucks you in,
Darkness swallows all within.
Didn't ask you,
So don't answer,
A moment is enough for you,
To lie,
Then to die.
Try your best,
But you wont find rest,
Not here, in the shadow of deaths,
Not anywhere, whatever else is left.
Whats outside, thats inside,
Whats down, its upside.
Or is it the other way around?
Lookin for answers, you never found
Why the trouble?
Time aint double.
Why the trouble lookin everywhere,
When you can't see it...nowhere.
An answer, in your eyes,
Can't see it, cuz of the bright lights,
Of white lies,
Put in front your nose,
Pulled on fishing lines,
All the lies,
All the promises, you want to buy,
Wasting all your time, while the
answer passes you by.
By the time you see,
By the time you hear,
Its all too late,
somewhere lost, in the sea.
This flows really well and what i took from it was someone not being able to see the truth, see what is really right there in front of them...so many lies shadow them for being able to understand and by the time they do wake up ...it will be too late!
am i close ? lol
Brilliant write IM :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Gettin warmer...lol :) thank you for readin :)
9 Years Ago
You've got the point...but somethin is missin...
9 Years Ago
noooooo... lol ...ok rereading it for like the 20th time.. :)
9 Years Ago
Lol. Okay. I'm thinkin i should edit it, so its easier to see it.
9 Years Ago
ok sea, drowning...
9 Years Ago
Getting closer... Okay, i'll cut the crap, and get to the point... Lol. Drowning, yes, but in what e.. read moreGetting closer... Okay, i'll cut the crap, and get to the point... Lol. Drowning, yes, but in what exactly?
9 Years Ago
i want to say lies, ...no?
9 Years Ago
First prize goes to you :) lol.
9 Years Ago
woop woop ,..do i get a badge and sticker too?
9 Years Ago
Yeah you do...but lets not forget, that the first prize is.. 1.000.000€ :) :) lol.
9 Years Ago
lol..you are too funny... well i cant wait to receive my money in the post with my badge and sticker.. read morelol..you are too funny... well i cant wait to receive my money in the post with my badge and sticker! :)
9 Years Ago
Okay...hold on...i've still gotta rob a bank...lol :) :) :) :)
9 Years Ago
its ok I'm a paitent person .. lol
9 Years Ago
*patient.....
9 Years Ago
Lololololololol :) :) :) :) :) :) :) this reminds me of a joke. :) :)
9 Years Ago
.... tapping my foot waiting ... do you have the get away car warmed up?
9 Years Ago
Nope...still waitin for the police to block the entrance, search the buildin, and get to the conclus.. read moreNope...still waitin for the police to block the entrance, search the buildin, and get to the conclusion that i must have left through the exit... Lol.
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9 Years Ago
LMSO ... look at you all mission impossible
9 Years Ago
Lol. Remember the scene, when Ethan is holdin on to the plain, while its takin off, and he's yellin:.. read moreLol. Remember the scene, when Ethan is holdin on to the plain, while its takin off, and he's yellin: "Open the door! ... The other door..."
9 Years Ago
lol yeh ... i love those movies... that is from the new one rogue nation not out here until july 31s.. read morelol yeh ... i love those movies... that is from the new one rogue nation not out here until july 31st !! looks good!
9 Years Ago
Yup...can't wait to watch it. :)
9 Years Ago
yeh him and the British actor simon peg are a funny pair....
even the screen i the car where .. read moreyeh him and the British actor simon peg are a funny pair....
even the screen i the car where it is flying in the air and he asked
" you got your seatbelt on?"
"You are asking me that now? lol
see that is you right now trying to get me my money!!... lol
9 Years Ago
Yeah, lol they've got a few of those crackers all over their movies. I like those funny lines in act.. read moreYeah, lol they've got a few of those crackers all over their movies. I like those funny lines in action movies. Like there are a lot in "The expendables" both one and two. As for your money... Lol. I can imagine, sitting in a pub, bragging about opening a bank...with a crowbar. Lol.
9 Years Ago
yeh seen both of those movies too. The constant one liners , humor laced througtout actions movies .. read moreyeh seen both of those movies too. The constant one liners , humor laced througtout actions movies make them so much more fun!
Lol in the pub bragging about our Mission already ... thats to funny! :)
9 Years Ago
Yup...the local gangsters gonna be jealouse....lol.lol.
Yup...but seein it on the screen is better. Anyhow, i just love those parts when they pull a prank o.. read moreYup...but seein it on the screen is better. Anyhow, i just love those parts when they pull a prank on captain Harris...lol. Like when they put glue on the loudspeaker...ha ha ha ha ha. :) or when they switched the oxygen tank for helium...lol.
An honest feeling write that seems to be searching for the truth desperately, not sure where to find it or even how to look. A helpless type of feeling that works well. It would work even better if you paid a little more attention to grammar and punctuation. When a writing is good, as this one is, the little things going wrong can derail the piece. Nice write. take care...dan
"Can't see it, cuz of the bright lights,
Of white lies,
Put in front your nose,
Pulled on fishing lines,
All the lies, " brilliant imagery - fishing lines of lies and like the fish we see soemthing else - food in the fishes case - rewards in the human case.
This flows really well and what i took from it was someone not being able to see the truth, see what is really right there in front of them...so many lies shadow them for being able to understand and by the time they do wake up ...it will be too late!
am i close ? lol
Brilliant write IM :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Gettin warmer...lol :) thank you for readin :)
9 Years Ago
You've got the point...but somethin is missin...
9 Years Ago
noooooo... lol ...ok rereading it for like the 20th time.. :)
9 Years Ago
Lol. Okay. I'm thinkin i should edit it, so its easier to see it.
9 Years Ago
ok sea, drowning...
9 Years Ago
Getting closer... Okay, i'll cut the crap, and get to the point... Lol. Drowning, yes, but in what e.. read moreGetting closer... Okay, i'll cut the crap, and get to the point... Lol. Drowning, yes, but in what exactly?
9 Years Ago
i want to say lies, ...no?
9 Years Ago
First prize goes to you :) lol.
9 Years Ago
woop woop ,..do i get a badge and sticker too?
9 Years Ago
Yeah you do...but lets not forget, that the first prize is.. 1.000.000€ :) :) lol.
9 Years Ago
lol..you are too funny... well i cant wait to receive my money in the post with my badge and sticker.. read morelol..you are too funny... well i cant wait to receive my money in the post with my badge and sticker! :)
9 Years Ago
Okay...hold on...i've still gotta rob a bank...lol :) :) :) :)
9 Years Ago
its ok I'm a paitent person .. lol
9 Years Ago
*patient.....
9 Years Ago
Lololololololol :) :) :) :) :) :) :) this reminds me of a joke. :) :)
9 Years Ago
.... tapping my foot waiting ... do you have the get away car warmed up?
9 Years Ago
Nope...still waitin for the police to block the entrance, search the buildin, and get to the conclus.. read moreNope...still waitin for the police to block the entrance, search the buildin, and get to the conclusion that i must have left through the exit... Lol.
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
9 Years Ago
LMSO ... look at you all mission impossible
9 Years Ago
Lol. Remember the scene, when Ethan is holdin on to the plain, while its takin off, and he's yellin:.. read moreLol. Remember the scene, when Ethan is holdin on to the plain, while its takin off, and he's yellin: "Open the door! ... The other door..."
9 Years Ago
lol yeh ... i love those movies... that is from the new one rogue nation not out here until july 31s.. read morelol yeh ... i love those movies... that is from the new one rogue nation not out here until july 31st !! looks good!
9 Years Ago
Yup...can't wait to watch it. :)
9 Years Ago
yeh him and the British actor simon peg are a funny pair....
even the screen i the car where .. read moreyeh him and the British actor simon peg are a funny pair....
even the screen i the car where it is flying in the air and he asked
" you got your seatbelt on?"
"You are asking me that now? lol
see that is you right now trying to get me my money!!... lol
9 Years Ago
Yeah, lol they've got a few of those crackers all over their movies. I like those funny lines in act.. read moreYeah, lol they've got a few of those crackers all over their movies. I like those funny lines in action movies. Like there are a lot in "The expendables" both one and two. As for your money... Lol. I can imagine, sitting in a pub, bragging about opening a bank...with a crowbar. Lol.
9 Years Ago
yeh seen both of those movies too. The constant one liners , humor laced througtout actions movies .. read moreyeh seen both of those movies too. The constant one liners , humor laced througtout actions movies make them so much more fun!
Lol in the pub bragging about our Mission already ... thats to funny! :)
9 Years Ago
Yup...the local gangsters gonna be jealouse....lol.lol.
Yup...but seein it on the screen is better. Anyhow, i just love those parts when they pull a prank o.. read moreYup...but seein it on the screen is better. Anyhow, i just love those parts when they pull a prank on captain Harris...lol. Like when they put glue on the loudspeaker...ha ha ha ha ha. :) or when they switched the oxygen tank for helium...lol.