This morning

In the chains,
That bind my brains
At night...

The shock, still living,
The darkness, still daring.
An image from the many,
From the nightmares, of reality...

At night, seeing dark things,
At day, expressing feelings.
Another morning,
Another hopeless moaning
Of the realisation...
You're not here.

Sleep paralysis from the past night,
Wait..this aint right,
I'm too tired to fight,
Whether it be wrong or right,
I've got no hope in sight.

The illness without cure,
That corrupts mind, make it unpure
And all i can say bout it, is "F**k"

Crawl out of bed,
Careful, don't hit your head.

The drunk feeling,
Of not awake but not dreaming,
A cup of coffe steaming.
As thoughts begin their streaming.

Author's Note

Any opinions are welcome :)

Reviews

[E G TEN]

Hello IM, I can see clearly your true motives in this writing, very nice
Job my friend, you wake up and you got the whole world to conquer
I give this writing a 100% rating! :-)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you for the read and rate :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Though i didn't write about that. Don't get me wrong... The poem can be read many ways. What you mentioned is one of them. :)

[E G TEN]

Hehehe.. just woke up, so that's the meaning I preferred :-) you are right though! :-)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Lol good mornin :)

[Cassie]

eyyy....I would say we all have such days. You have put it so well. good stuff

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are right. Thanks for reading :)

[fattycbreezy52]

This is quite a relatable writeup from you.Loved it.Specially,the feeling of "f**k'.We all have been through this or are still going somewhere:)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'd love to hear what do you think what is the meaning of this one...or what inspired it? :)

[fattycbreezy52]

lol.I did that already.Still,to be precise,for me it appeared to be the story of a perplexed mind.The worst part being the deprivation of sleep,But the last stanza,still shows the mind trying to emerge out of this confused state and wanting to start afresh.Coffee being the best stimulant.Need I say more?;D

[fattycbreezy52]

To me*it appeared

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yup that is correct :) thank you :)

[closed]

a write that exemplifies the worst moment of any day
the place between sleep and awake...

morning


-Dream

[sereenaoutloud]

You are really shining IM , go you! I love this write, dark and powerful ,..brilliant!! :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome work! "The illness without cure,
That corrupts mind, make it unpure
And all i can say bout it, is "F**k" "

I really like that stanza my friend :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :) yeah, for sleep paralysis nobody has a "cure".

[B]

Quite sweet
I see a change of heart
A need to explore new things
Sweet

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[Joel Armstrong]

Loved this one IM!!and like Dan said your writing has indeed become more mature,refined ,and is just perfect with a sprinkle of darkness.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[dan]

IM, Lately your writing seems to be evolving, maturing. This piece is very gripping throughout. The tone is set early on then expertly carried through to the end. I like this style, you wear it well. Keep writing! take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for readin :)

[A writer]

So powerful, awesome write as always. :) as for sleep paralysis...I googled it...seems you are right, there is no "cure". But there are ways to reduce the chance of it happening.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I know... But it does not help. It happens almost every night/dawn. Eh... I've got used to the nightmares, but the false wake ups are still horrifying. Anyways, thank you. :)

[A writer]

I know it must be terrifying... But what does it feel like? if you don't mind me asking.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

There is really no difference between that and being awake... except for an odd feeling, and the things you see happening, things that usually scare the hell out of people...but none of that can happen in reality. Thats how you know that you're not awake. When you do wake up, you see that nothing really happened. Though...sometimes breathing gets really hard, and i get sacred...like am i gonna suffocate? lol. But nothing really happens, its just that you're awake and asleep in the same time...and whatever you would see in your dream, you will see it in 3D, around you. Like it was there. Its really hard to explain.

[A writer]

Oh... I see. Thats horrific.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yup.... It is...