Its the same

Hell...love. Makes people crazy.

Awake...
Or asleep.
Who knows? its really deep.
No way out,
Not like i want to get out.
Its plague, its cancer,
Without it, life will cancel.
No cure, no hope,
Its a rope.

Hopelessly, drifting off,
Off to sleep, in a dream,
Where i'm awake,
But i'm asleep.

The same scent,
The message sent,
The same sight,
Open my eyes wide. its all right.
The same voice,
The same choice.
In the same room,
The same big boom,
The same hour, the same second,
First, not second.
The same thirst,
The same energy burst.

Wake up, and fall asleep,
In the same reality, same dream.

Reviews

[dan]

This is actually quite well-written. The irregular rhyme illustrates that not all rhymes need to follow a rigid structure to convey a thought. This is a nice format for you, the poem grips the reader and pulls the reader along, wondering what the bend in the road will bring. Keep it up. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for readin, and reviewin.

[B]

I know this one as well
It's you lie to yourself saying tomorrow it wont be like that
you open your eyes
and he just comes so fast
its like hold on
i just opened my eyes
of course he is a thought
he isnt actually there
lucky me lol
sucks

[Dani The Unreviewed]

got it right on the spot.

[B]

:)
I love the picture on your profile

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. how come? it's probably one of the ugliest i could ever find... lol :-)

[B]

Its edgy
Its not ugly
He has a stick with lights on it
hes cool

[Dani The Unreviewed]

http://www.google.rs/url?q=http://www.metal-archives.com/albums/Pokolg%25C3%25A9p/Pokoli_sz%25C3%25ADnj%25C3%25A1t%25C3%25A9k/5276&sa=U&ved=0CAsQwW4oADAAahUKEwik7dyPnpjIAhWk73IKHT5cDI8&usg=AFQjCNGG8lFWqy1kZkRmPbTTtesDN6hPBQ the link to the full sized image. :-)

[B]

Thank you
so what is new

[Dani The Unreviewed]

nothing really. just tryin to figure out, why do people lie... anyway long, complicated story. what about you?

[B]

Let them worry
and you have fun lol
Get some ice cream
Do you like ice cream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

yea i love it B-) who doesn't? lol.

[B]

I know one grumpy person that doesnt
i love vanilla what about you

[Dani The Unreviewed]

any flavor :-)

[B]

Waw
U beat me there

[Dani The Unreviewed]

lol. when it comes to. icecream, people better get outta ma way. lol

[B]

lol
I know the feeling

[Destiny Dreamer]

Owww ... very intense piece here. Felt reading it. Great job!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work IM... I like the rhyming you used it worked well in this write. It's a great write I enjoyed it very much :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

Yeah! I mean this one is so powerful. Your writes make me remember what a great thing writing really is.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[A writer]

No need to thank me. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are so kind :)

[A writer]

I know. Lol. :)

[sereenaoutloud]

This is powerful, I was sucked right into this ..just brilliant IM :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Aww hell. This is really messin me up.