A painful dream

Ever since you left,
My life is a promise unkept.

Of you i'm dreamin,
Even in this pain, i'm dreamin...

Dreamin of your beautiful face,
Dreamin of your comforting hugs,
Dreamin of your sweet lips,
Of your powerful arms,
Your welcomin smile,
Your beauty,
The electricity.


It always left me without words,
How the sight of you works
Works out every pain,
All the loss turns to gain.
With you its simple, no pain,
Cloudless blue skies no rain.

Love filled air,
Your beautiful blonde hair.

Every memory makes me smile,
Yet also brings pain back in style.
Its so beautiful,
But painful,
Dreamin of you.

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

Hey, I really loved this part:
It always left me without words,
How the sight of you works
Works out every pain,
All the loss turns to gain.
With you its simple, no pain,
Cloudless blue skies no rain.

The rhyme makes it flow in a beautiful way, the words are full of wonder and emotion. The whole poem is intense with what love causes when it's far away. You did a great job with this piece! Thanks for asking me to read it.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for reading :) really appreciate it.

[closed]

really well penned IM
we have to hold on to our dreams

sometimes it's all we have


-Dream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[ANTO]

This is beautifully sad and moving IM.
The last three lines caused a big sigh in this reader.

Bittersweet writing my friend.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much for readin reviewin, i always appreciate it.