Of you i'm dreamin,
Even in this pain, i'm dreamin...
Dreamin of your beautiful face,
Dreamin of your comforting hugs,
Dreamin of your sweet lips,
Of your powerful arms,
Your welcomin smile,
Your beauty,
The electricity.
It always left me without words,
How the sight of you works
Works out every pain,
All the loss turns to gain.
With you its simple, no pain,
Cloudless blue skies no rain.
Love filled air,
Your beautiful blonde hair.
Every memory makes me smile,
Yet also brings pain back in style.
Its so beautiful,
But painful,
Dreamin of you.
Hey, I really loved this part:
It always left me without words,
How the sight of you works
Works out every pain,
All the loss turns to gain.
With you its simple, no pain,
Cloudless blue skies no rain.
The rhyme makes it flow in a beautiful way, the words are full of wonder and emotion. The whole poem is intense with what love causes when it's far away. You did a great job with this piece! Thanks for asking me to read it.
Hey, I really loved this part:
It always left me without words,
How the sight of you works
Works out every pain,
All the loss turns to gain.
With you its simple, no pain,
Cloudless blue skies no rain.
The rhyme makes it flow in a beautiful way, the words are full of wonder and emotion. The whole poem is intense with what love causes when it's far away. You did a great job with this piece! Thanks for asking me to read it.
Amazing, just AMAZING!!! WOW! Really memories can be beautiful yet very painful of the loved one, when they aren't with us! Even we found the pain in the best of memories.. I loved your poem so much :) Keep writing!
This was beautiful! Sad, but written with so much love. It's difficult to get past each day when the one you love is away. Trust me I know and I felt this one deeply
I liked this piece a lot. Loved the way you expressed the emptiness one feels after someone you love leaves you in the mud.But something I've always kept in mind is dat if you could love the wrong person this much then just imagine how much you could love the right person who's meant for you .I loved this one.do write more
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you. I did write more...
9 Years Ago
And he is the right one. He didn't leave because he wanted to.
I did read your other poems too,a few. Honestly I really liked em.
9 Years Ago
Hmm. We can't say my friend.u have ur whole life ahead of you.I mean I'm 16 and I don't know how thi.. read moreHmm. We can't say my friend.u have ur whole life ahead of you.I mean I'm 16 and I don't know how things will turn out,but I do hope.so take heart my friend
9 Years Ago
Thank you. Honestly, the only thing i have in front of me is just pain...not life. And please don't .. read moreThank you. Honestly, the only thing i have in front of me is just pain...not life. And please don't say "don't give up" cause i already did give up.
"Dreamin of your beautiful face,
Dreamin of your comforting hugs,
Dreamin of your sweet lips, "
The things we are left to dream of when we are missing that special someone. I can definitely relate to this. Last night I sat and talked to someone who used to be important to be and to be able to look her in the eyes like old times was crazy only to wake up and face reality. Great write :)
Keep hanging in there. This is a very endearing and heartfelt sentiment. The first two lines of the last stanza are so truthful. You're tugging at my heart strings.
Great write!! You did a great description of your lover!! I know it hurts to see that one person that at one time loved is gone and all you do is think and dream about them. The thing that I hate is that I believe that sleeping is a way to get away from the world for awhile and a place that you can just dream about all the things that's really bothering you inside. But when you see the people that have hurt you or abandoned you in your dream, really it's no longer a dream, right? Nope. It's more like a nightmare, but really I know that really inside it's just how I'm feeling inside and I know it's something that I don't need to live out in real life. But keep writing, because you can write, my friend! Never quite writing!
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9 Years Ago
You are absolutely right about that! i mean...I've spent quiet a lot of time sleepin, just so i don'.. read moreYou are absolutely right about that! i mean...I've spent quiet a lot of time sleepin, just so i don't have to take the pain. And no, it doesn't help. Thanks for readin.
9 Years Ago
Your very welcome! Thanks for reading the reply my friend! But we all have to deal with the rough wa.. read moreYour very welcome! Thanks for reading the reply my friend! But we all have to deal with the rough waters that come our way, don't way? But all we have to be is strong, strong, strong!
"how the sight of you works, works out every pain"
Wow IM this is really good! The whole write from start to finish is so heartfelt, so raw.
You suck the reader into your pain, we feel your sorrow!
sad but so beautifully written...One of my favorite of yours IM!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very very much! It means a lot to me that you like it.
9 Years Ago
You can really see you growing as a writer IM...you have always been good but you are growing and g.. read moreYou can really see you growing as a writer IM...you have always been good but you are growing and getting better and better with each write !! GO you!!