Shotglass of hope

Vodka...

Slowly twisting
The smell... thirsting,
Bursting.
My throat burning,
The drink hitting,
My stomache, pounding
World spinning...
Reason sinking...

Mouth already stinking,
Cause i'm drinking.

After the sixth drink i get.
Starting to forget,
And a little regret.
Memories...my mind they get...

With the drink, they blow it away.
One more, and i fly away,
A big hey
From behind...headache.
My "friends"...i already lay
On the ground...can't play.
Come on...i wanna pay.

A cigaret in my hand,
Its not a trend...
But drunk,
I'm feelin like in a trunk.
Look at that punk.

People avoid me like i was a skunk,
But its only that my mind sunk.
Yeah, i'm drunk.

Author's Note

Last night...i've got a little drunk. And i think thats what i'm gonna do from now on....when i can't take it, I'll just drink.

Reviews

[A writer]

Eh... Alcohol wont help your problems. Anyhow, I don't have any right to tell you what you should do. Its your choice. Back to your writing, I love your work. :)

[Lizardo]

Wow, I'll go with what Dream said, nice wordplay with the poem.
I like your poems because... you kind of transport us to the way your're feeling or the exact scene of it too.
Though I'm not a guy who would tell you do drink, but I'm nobody to tell at the same time. Just some random person you've met in a writing website (that's the truth) but anyways leaving that behing, I like the poem, maybe not the meaning so much, but you know that I really like your poems no matter how they are written (I'm telling the truth IM) So yeah, Great poem as always, this one goes to my favorites.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[closed]

wow
this is wordplay...

i wish you weren't having to resort to this to deal with your pain
but we all have some vice or another

but what's neat is that you've taken yet another new direction with your writing

so kudos to that


-Dream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[AaronFreitas]

Nice write my friend :) I've only been in this position a few times haha... drinking isn't the answer although it definitely provides temporary assistance. Instead of alcohol I've turned to weed... the magical herb. I smile and forget my problems... the power of cannabis :) Good write i enjoyed it :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks. Hmmm...I'll have to try it someday. But for now I'll have a bottle or two nearby when the problems get on my nerves.

[RiverRei]

I used to be like this in college. I didn't drink much but I loved it when I did cuz I could forget everything that I was going through and just be in the moment. It was such a great change for me and I wanted to drink more but I always made a fool of myself. I can relate to this on more than one level. We're way more similar than I though and I don't mind that :) Very nice piece, sweetie. I loved it. It's going in my library for later.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you. Yeah...i'm no alcoholic...but i will be.

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ha ha ha ha very fun. realy make me laugh. it s remind me some my stories from my youth. i love it. maybe i should get drunk too. that s always working like this. i always say i never do that or i dont want be like them. and on second day i do and i am one of them. have nice drunk evening.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I'm not drunk right now...was last night. But now i'm not...unfortunately.

[...]

nevermind there is always drunk day at our horizont.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Heh...ironic. A few weeks ago i'd avoid drunk people...now I'll just become one of em.