Smoke...

Smoke...

A Chapter by Dani The Unreviewed
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Its smoke...what is there to say?

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A cigaret in my hand,
The first one...and...
And then to take the lighter.
After week its a fighter,
To resist the frighter.
Desire to smoke.
Its still better than coke.
A weird code,
To excuse the hold.
The hold of the nicotine.
Every time, i light one,
I wonder, how come it won.
How did it all begin?
With the very first going down,
Straight to my lungs,
Cancer hung
The curtain
The possibilities are certain.
It will cut my life,
Like a knife.
"You gotta stop"
Many people pop
When they see the cop,
Asking for id.
Then the monsters food
Is taken...
Its hungry,
Getting grumpy.
Another one from the stash,
And nicotine's splash,
In my blood,
Its a flood.


© 2016 Dani The Unreviewed


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This is very well written and has an awesome flow. The nicotine addiction so many struggle to break! It also feel like it has and underlying meaning of fighting so hard, trying to break free but who hard it can be and how easy to fall back into old habits!!
Love this write IM...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much.



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I like this as a whole but I can't really relate. I've wanted to try smoking but I've never done it so I don't know what it's like. I have had addictions before though so I can relate in that aspect. Smoking is hard :( The only thing I wanna say is it's spelled 'cigarettes'...overall a really good piece that describes the struggle of all addicts :( Sorry babe. I'm here for you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

I think all addictions are hard. Thank you so much:)
Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Oh...and thanks for noticing the spelling error.
This is very well written and has an awesome flow. The nicotine addiction so many struggle to break! It also feel like it has and underlying meaning of fighting so hard, trying to break free but who hard it can be and how easy to fall back into old habits!!
Love this write IM...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
I really liked this as well. It was simple, not drowning in pity, but subtle crying to it, you know? Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

thank you.
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Oh so meaningful! Amazing write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Thank you.
this was interesting
i like that you're going in a new direction with your poetry

good use of metaphor


-Dream

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Thank you.
closed

9 Years Ago

youre welcome
This one's about smoking..........

Posted 9 Years Ago



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